Insult To Injury

A horde of thoughts and Revelations, All which beg to be perceived Return my Woe and devastation- Give back to me the need to grieve! In Youth had found true elation, A childhood I'd never leave For Life is lived in desperation (If that Truth is to be believed)

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Danesh Morgan

Date: 8/29/2013 8:30:00 AM

why the brackets it gives a negative feel to this poem like a dead end that's how i feel

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/29/2013 8:40:00 AM

The " dead end" feel you picked up was exactly my intention; it was astute of you to realize it. And it's ok if you didn't really like this one; every poet writes his fair share of "duds" lol And again, you are right: the title really doesn't fit, unless you take lines 3 and 4 into consideration, I suppose. Not all my titles fit the piece as snugly as I might like. I make poetic errors all the time.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/29/2013 8:40:00 AM

Oh, and thanks for stopping by and for the read and reply :)

Danesh Morgan
Date: 8/29/2013 8:31:00 AM

the title don't suit the poem i feel. . .