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In My Journey To Autumn

Soft caressing breeze blowing around me Enveloped with summer’s fragrance Awakening my slumber body and soul In my journey to the autumn Enveloped with summer’s fragrance Bringing memories of spring and summer In my journey to the autumn Making my days radiant with sun shine Bringing memories of spring and summer Wrapping me up with it's warm smile Making my days radiant with sun shine Bring back my joy of summer Wrapping me up with it's warm smile Soft caressing breeze blowing around me This is a thanksgiving Pantoum to Suzanne Delaney and Richard Lamoureux. If not for them I would never knew the art of Pantoum.

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/22/2013 12:43:00 AM

Autumn is my favorite season (visually). The oranges, reds and yellows are at treat for the eyes. You are doing so well in this form, but in the last stanza I believe you are missing some lines. It can be kinda confusing, I know, but one thing that helps me remember is this, "Every single line is repeated twice".

Manel Gunatillake
Date: 5/22/2013 3:02:00 AM

Thank you, When I referred in the web,for the rules one place claim it is abcd, bedf,egfh, ia. 4 stanzas In another it says: abcd,bedf,ecfa Only 3 stanzas. But as you say I feel the 2nd version is more meaningful. eevry line repeats twice. Thank you I will work out another on this rule. love

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 5/20/2013 7:10:00 PM

This is lovely. I am so glad you are having fun with this form. I have just written another and I love how these expand on a theme. Very satisfying to write. Look forward to more of these.