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In A Hotel Room

to whoever finds this

time has unwound since i first checked in, clock hands creep backwards replaying each hour
the mind's wraiths tiptoe on satin-soft feet
i hear the hotel's heartbeat
something moves within these walls, whispers behind floral decor, voices skitter
the tv witters like senility, air  s s n a k e s s  like smoke, static hissing in my ears
the bedside bible glitters blank    w   o   r   d   l   e   s   s      p   a   g   e   s
my mind is fuzzy as the tinny tv
how many hours have passed?
now a twilight of sapphires sifts, drifts into the room
pale figures are filtering, slithering belly-deep through gloom

trapped the walls squeezing the key in the lock screeching frantic fingers scratching
for some way out, the dead phone doesn't connect except
to shrill with bad news and more bad news, ice trickles of chill diagnoses
fear seeping like condensation shrieks echoing in the walls
                                                                                              the room

the room is a galleon, tempest-tossed
                                                              the bed

the bed is a starched white wasteland, first cold then hot cold hot, siberia to sahara
how many have shivered and sweated in this bed? how many are dead?
the crushing heart attacks, sudden strokes, sad suicides
six storeys down to the waiting street through the window's snide slide

what's the song? you can check out any time you like (but never leave)
escape is draping a noose around me, there's no reprieve

i'm checking out it's time to leave

Copyright © Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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  1. Date: 3/29/2014 4:41:00 PM
    nice win

  1. Date: 3/23/2014 9:25:00 PM
    The Shining meets Hotel California.. Great work and Win!

  1. Date: 3/23/2014 7:42:00 PM
    I;ve been there so many times, well said, love the creative layout, Charlotte, congratulations on your win, thanks for entering my contest.

  1. Date: 3/23/2014 3:42:00 PM
    my.. totally absorbing my senses, charlotte.. sweet congrats and huggs!

  1. Date: 3/23/2014 10:28:00 AM
    Great free verse, Charlotte! Congratulations on your win! Ruben.

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    Date: 3/23/2014 10:30:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I think I got inspired by your "hotel's Bible" ...
  1. Date: 3/22/2014 8:04:00 PM
    Charlotte, congratulations on the win... Verlena

  1. Date: 4/11/2013 10:40:00 AM
    Astounding, atmospheric tone. Excellent work!

  1. Date: 3/16/2013 6:01:00 PM
    Wow! The best twist on "Hotel California" I've ever read! Beautifully done. I'm glad you got out of there. Jack

  1. Date: 3/11/2013 8:36:00 PM
    Thank you Charlotte, for thinking so “ you write with a certain romantic style ” and life, for some of us, is a bittersweet journey, from beginning to its end, unfortunately that seems to be my fate !!, as you will see in the depths of my stuff, should you delve into it . “ In A Hotel Room ” just knocks me out and gives me reason to rethink, what am I doing ??? B. J. “A” 2 ( Bill . )

  1. Date: 3/1/2013 8:34:00 PM
    Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my poem. I read this one again. It is really really good!

  1. Date: 3/1/2013 7:11:00 PM
    :-) stopping by to say hi and thank you for the nice little comment~ LINAD

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 6:13:00 PM
    Spooky one! I love it! Congratulations.

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 1:51:00 AM
    Many Congratulations on your win Charlotte, sorry i am a bit late xx

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 1:29:00 AM
    Good job! - Your hotel is 7 star! - Congratulations! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 8:28:00 PM
    Yes, I was thinking hotel california long before you got to that one line. Excellent writing. I would expect nothing less from Charlotte PUddifoot!! big congrats to you.

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:50:00 PM
    Very sad and compelling. Congratulations on your win Susan. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:12:00 PM
    Charlotte, CONGRATULATIONS :-) ~ love your awesome winning poem in Susan's contest.. take care.. PD

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 3:40:00 PM
    Nice imagery, Charlotte! I thought it was an episode of the Twilight Zone for a moment. Congratulations!

  1. Date: 2/14/2013 4:05:00 AM
    Charlotte this is a wonderful take on the hotel room perspective, good luck...David