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I just can't win

I just can’t win!
I try so hard to please you with everything I do

I present myself so wonderful
But still you find fault in me

Oh that I knew the way to your heart
then I could rest and find the solace I so seek

Then I would understand how I can approach your lofty place
Where I see the less than perfect run and find The Mercy Seat

You lift the veil from off your face- I behold such beauty there
Then I see you as you are and I see me as I am

No I cannot win with efforts mine - for they are like dirt covered in gloss
but with your life in mine - I know I am forgiven and totally accepted and clean

For it was you who won the crown for me- and now I am seated with you on your throne
Father I can always win - for you have won all for me- so boldly and assuredly I now can run to the finishing line and accept the victor’s crown

© Brenda V Northeast 25 May 2012

For Joe Flach’s contest- I just can’t win.

Copyright © Brenda Victoria Northeast

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  1. Date: 6/13/2014 9:12:00 PM
    You are a winner when I read you. A very captivating read with a whole new version of inspiration. Thank you for shairng and keep up the great work!

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 11:52:00 PM
    'U just can't win', but your poem just won my heart.*smiles* Dis is glorious! Thanks Kingfemi.

  1. Date: 6/14/2012 6:55:00 AM
    Brenda; this is very beautiful. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

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    Date: 6/14/2012 7:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Lucilla- Has anyone told you - You have a striking resemblance to Sophia Loren : )
  1. Date: 6/11/2012 3:02:00 PM
    The goal is real andeffort is needed but your journey is well under way and the trip is wonderful to follow. All the bestin the contest Brenda

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 6:14:00 AM
    I Like this work. I will dip in again . God Bless. Dave.

  1. Date: 5/31/2012 9:57:00 AM
    I thought for a moment you were complaining to your husband. No, you can't win with him, but you picked the right Father for victory. Love, daver

  1. Date: 5/27/2012 2:21:00 AM
    Glad you enjoyed my Potter's House poem, Brenda. I enjoyed reading your I just can't win poem. Good luck in Joe's contest. I look forward to seeing you at the finishing line, sister. Love & God bless, Maureen

  1. Date: 5/25/2012 4:57:00 AM
    aww lovley best wishes for the contest God bless you

  1. Date: 5/24/2012 11:01:00 PM
    i love your version of i just can't win on joe's contest. This poem takes a light of its own. Best of luck. Ronny

  1. Date: 5/24/2012 8:29:00 PM
    Love this poem of yours..good luck in the contest!!!