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I Feel Like Dancing

Drink me ill this pleasure still, And cure me with your poisoned pills- Before I lose all my strength, But, oh! I lost that long ago! Dreamily dancing to and fro... With legs of lead and no feet to stand, And a phantom partner to hold my hand A languid trance and lulled Romance To seize me whole in its expanse Never I yield, though quite out of breath- Drunkenly dancing in the Depths Of Death *RHYME BATTLE CONTEST ENTRY 8-29-13

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Robin Davis

Date: 12/9/2013 9:03:00 AM

Chan This is an "eerie" and "spooky" write that sends chills through the reader and gives them a feeling of sadness and gloom. Nice job Thanks for the funny comment on my Halos and Wings poem. Yes, you are a bad bad boy. HEE HEE Love and hugs

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 12/9/2013 9:16:00 AM

lol Thanks, my dear friend <3

Karen Anglesey

Date: 10/13/2013 1:14:00 PM

Congrats on your well deserved win. I really like this one... wish I was as inspired as you, but not lately :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/14/2013 8:24:00 AM

Thanks, Karen. It's one of my older, yet favorite pieces, and it's a little longer than most of the others so I thought it might have a fighting chance at a win ;)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/10/2013 8:32:00 PM

J T A P., , congrats with your winning poem in the rhyme battle.... xox~ LINDA

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/11/2013 7:48:00 AM

Thanks so much, Linda! :)

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 10/9/2013 6:16:00 PM

a BIG congrats on your rhyme battle win! Dark and yet beautiful! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 12:31:00 PM

Many thanks, Rhonda; I very much appreciate it :)

Skat A

Date: 10/8/2013 8:27:00 PM

Nice win..........SKAT

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/10/2013 12:30:00 PM

Thank you, Skat :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/7/2013 3:24:00 PM

Terrific poem! Congratulations on your well deserved win!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/7/2013 3:44:00 PM

Thanks, SP! You know how much I appreciate it <3

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/6/2013 7:45:00 PM

nicely penned....congrats on your fine win :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/7/2013 9:47:00 AM

A thousand thanks, Sandra! I appreciate it so much! :)

Juli- Michelle

Date: 10/6/2013 7:40:00 PM

Loved loved loved your poem! Congratulations in my contest, thank you for sharing your poem with me. Love, Juli-Michelle

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/7/2013 9:49:00 AM

* lol should say "happy you held" ;)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/7/2013 9:48:00 AM

My pleasure, Juli. I'm happy you enjoyed it, and equally happy you help a contest specifically for us "Rhymers". Thanks for choosing my piece as a winning entry :D

Elai Cee

Date: 9/1/2013 2:33:00 AM

cute! ... wonderful day!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/5/2013 9:10:00 AM

Thank you, Elai! :)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 8/31/2013 5:55:00 PM

A fine write. I love the flow of thoughts in this one.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/5/2013 9:09:00 AM

Many, many thanks, Mustapha; your feedback is very much appreciated :)

Danesh Morgan

Date: 8/29/2013 11:08:00 PM

this is so like phantom of the opera style but without a partner. . . coz he's got her in his mind. . . and now in my favourite poem list as well as now you are also my favourite poet too.

Danesh Morgan
Date: 10/17/2013 2:27:00 AM

Congrats my dear friend

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/30/2013 6:01:00 AM

That's a very humbling compliment, Danesh, and I cannot really articulate how much it means to me for a reader to say that. "Thank you" is not strong or proper enough; just know you have my sincerest appreciation. And might I emphasize on what a talented poet you are as well. Thank you for stopping by; you and Karen have made my morning :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 8/29/2013 8:53:00 PM

Your writing is brilliant; spiraling on the edge of gloom. There is beauty in all of this chaos.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/30/2013 5:57:00 AM

Karen, every morning I get up and see you have left me another wonderful, positive and encouraging review; I can't tell you how happy you make my mornings; thank you so much :)

The Situation

Date: 8/29/2013 4:33:00 PM

A phantom partner.good line.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/30/2013 5:56:00 AM

Thanks, T.S.; I appreciate that :)