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I Dreamt I Was a King

I dreamt one night that I was a King. With royal garments sitting on a throne. Wealth before me I could have anything! On my finger was placed an emerald ring. It felt really cold chilling me to the bone. I dreamt one night that I was a King. There was beauty but my heart didn't sing. So many people still I felt alone. Wealth before me I could have anything. I wondered, what I should ask them to bring. Could anything soften my heart of stone? I dreamt one night I was a King. Sadly, I could't think of a single thing. I looked at my subjects I heard them moan. Wealth before me I could have anything. Within my court I heard an angel sing. Melting the cold with her majestic tone. Wealth before me I'd give her anything. I dreamt one night I was a King! My Carnival poem was an attempt to write a villanelle, I think I am a bit closer with this attempt.

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Arlene Smith

Date: 6/16/2014 10:43:00 AM

Richard, I was unaware of this form till someone pointed I had come close with one of my poems. I have to look up forms for contests..mthis is a masterful writing and I have learned much.. Hugs.. Arlene..

Damilola Olaniyi

Date: 1/15/2014 2:55:00 PM

I dreamt one night that I was a princess. I love this piece, its originality reminds me that I've not posted anything this year. Lovely

Carol Eastman

Date: 1/12/2014 11:24:00 AM

Having every thing can be to have nothing... Great write!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/12/2014 11:36:00 AM

Thanks Carol.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 1/10/2014 9:22:00 AM

Love tops riches any day. Like the creative way you expressed this.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/10/2014 9:42:00 AM

;0)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/6/2014 4:00:00 AM

I can easily picture you as king.... ;-)A benevolent king you would be.....and yes, you would abdicate for love.......So, the enchantress must have a beautiful voice....lovely

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2014 7:46:00 AM

In reality my enchantress has a beautiful speaking voice but when it comes to singing not so much *lol*.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/5/2014 6:47:00 PM

I like how you change the repeating lines. this is the modern way with villanelle, RIchard. Some will say those lines have to be always the same but thank heavens for variety.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2014 7:27:00 PM

Thanks Andrea.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 1/5/2014 2:50:00 PM

lovely Rick a good villanelle well done Shadow x smile hug

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2014 2:53:00 PM

Thanks Shadow.;o)

Tim B

Date: 1/5/2014 11:00:00 AM

Richard, the Vilanelle is my favorite form of poetry. You pulled it off admirably, especially with your word choice for the repeated lines. They are not easy to write or master, but they are beautiful. Thanks for sharing this one, it has a great message too about the more important things in life and what real wealth truly is.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2014 11:23:00 AM

Thanks Tim, you have honored me with your words. I am partial to the Terzanelle myself so I had to bend my mind around this form.

Tim B
Date: 1/5/2014 11:02:00 AM

*Villanelle Can't very well spell my favorite form of poetry incorrectly, :).

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 1/5/2014 9:02:00 AM

Very interesting and cool piece, Richard. Normally, I'm not a big fan of line repetition in rhyme, but you pulled it off effortlessly. Your words were well-executed, fluid, concise and well-expressed. Enjoyed very much; kudos :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2014 9:15:00 AM

Thanks Chan, I have only done a few in this form, I'm glad it appears effortless it was actualy a struggle to write *lol'

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/4/2014 7:56:00 PM

By jove I think you got it, on to Terzanelle! ;) Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2014 9:18:00 AM

I have written a number of Terzanelle, look under form and there are a number to view if you have the time. I hope you are having a good weekend Debbie.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/4/2014 10:13:00 PM

Thanks Debbie, I had read yours the other might and decided to give anther one a try.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 1/4/2014 4:05:00 PM

Weath means very little and in this write you've expressed it so well. my father trained me for the sole purpose of marry well, i learned how to read the classics, never went to collage though but how to dress, walk so on. but i married for love to a man whom had nothing to his name. but his heart was full of love just for me that's all i needed. cheri

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/4/2014 10:16:00 PM

You made the right choice. Thanks for this thoughtful comment.

David Williams

Date: 1/4/2014 1:02:00 PM

Richard this is avery nice villanelle, as always we wish for things but when we are under pressure we can never think of anything so I like the message….David

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/4/2014 1:25:00 PM

Thanks David. I was trying to say that we all think we want wealth and power but in the end we would gladly surrender it all for love.