Guilt

She begged me to make love to her I could not look into her eyes I wanted to but would not dare She begged me to make love to her I knew deep down it was not fair To lead her on with lust and lies She begged me to make love to her I could not look into her eyes ------------------------------------------ Contest: One NEW Triolet Sponsor: Alfred Vassallo

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/3/2014 9:09:00 PM

Yep, it has that triolet rhythm. Does "dare" sound like "her" in the way you speak English? I was just thinking of how some people pronounce words differently in different parts of The US, England, etc! This was a great triolet. Did you see Freddie removed his poems from the site and cancelled this contest? I had a triolet waiting in the wings to post for this contest and this is making me nuts now!!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/6/2014 4:36:00 PM

Hi Andrea! Yes, for us 'dare' and 'her' rhyme (there are sites that give both words as rhyming). // No, I had not realized that Freddie has removed his poems and cancelled the contest!! Does seem strange. I'll go have a look...// paul

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/1/2014 2:58:00 PM

You found it difficult to go ahead with this woman. You were strong - I just wonder what the reason was. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Paul Callus
Date: 10/1/2014 5:57:00 PM

Hi Matthew...thank you for stopping by. Age was the main reason....young girls are often infatuated by attraction to older persons! Peace to you too. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/1/2014 12:23:00 AM

This is exactly the way a triolet should read. As if no line is repeated, as if you only wanted two rhymes, and not a hint that the first two lines are the last two lines. It reads as if there were no rules and this was your exact write. Beautiful job I hope this ranks high in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/1/2014 2:50:00 PM

I'm so pleased you comment so positively on my triolet, Maurice. This form appears easy to write, but it is the smooth flow that makes it ... glad you found this to be the case. Thank you. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/30/2014 4:52:00 AM

What a gentleman! I wouldn't expect any less from you my friend, Paul! Excellent writing with so much sensitivity and candor!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/30/2014 4:58:00 PM

Thank you Demi. I'm no saint, but there are does and donts that form part of our way of living; we cannot afford to exceed limits. Appreciate your sincere comments, my friend. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/29/2014 7:03:00 PM

:) I see you you post it anyway..:) let's see how far this will go..(wink)!!!! expressive poem, I like the second line I could not look into her eyes..:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/1/2014 1:43:00 AM

can i borrow the second line and do a different turn but not triolet.. :D

Paul Callus
Date: 9/30/2014 4:54:00 PM

Yes, I did finally post it :) I'm glad you like it; that 2nd line is also my favourite. (...but I will look in yours...anytime:)) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/30/2014 8:51:00 AM

PAUL SOUPMAIL. :D!!!LOOL :D

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/29/2014 7:04:00 PM

I'd like to give a try this triolet but don't know yet what I'll write...:D ??? Topic...

Jack Horne

Date: 9/29/2014 11:19:00 AM

very deep and emotive write, my friend

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 2:50:00 PM

Thank you for your positive reaction to this poem, Jack...and for stopping by. // paul

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 9/29/2014 10:22:00 AM

Woah sensational! If she was much younger then it was great of u not to take advantage of her like many wud. Infatuation hapens but we hav to keep away frm temptations of exploitation. Cheers sir.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 3:50:00 PM

My deepest apologies...did not know what the 'S' stood for!! I bow in respect:)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri
Date: 9/29/2014 3:17:00 PM

I'm a lady not a sir pls. Cheers.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 2:52:00 PM

Thank you Sir!! Your insightful comments are very close to the mark! I appreciate your most welcome visit. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/29/2014 9:20:00 AM

Those eyes will get you won't they..Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..I wrote "Sneeze" about my surgery..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 9:40:00 AM

Thank you for finding the time to visit, Sara. I have been on your new post and can well relate to 'sneezing':) // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/29/2014 7:49:00 AM

Oh a poem of restraint Paul,,very rare,,unlike your poetry,,,ever so addictive,,,and love to linger there

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 3:10:00 PM

You are too kind, Harry...but I do love your lovely compliments! You are welcome to visit and linger to your heart's pleasure! Thank you. // paul

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/29/2014 4:47:00 AM

excellent piece of writing paul really love how you drew it

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 3:46:00 PM

Glad you found it to your liking, Liam. Thank you for stopping by once again. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/28/2014 11:43:00 PM

This poem says a lot about your character, which is admirable! Great poem with a sound message!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 3:54:00 PM

Thank you my fair lady! I appreciate your complimentary words. Lei e` troppo generosa! // paul

Ma Yaseen

Date: 9/28/2014 11:21:00 PM

The poem needs courage to write and to exist, seems you have the courage... well good luck for the contest..

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 3:45:00 PM

Thank you Malik; sometimes to express ourselves we have to show a bit of courage. // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 9/28/2014 11:09:00 PM

Very well done my friend.....temptations exist everywhere and we need to do things for the right reasons.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 11:30:00 AM

Many thanks, Tim. You are right...it's so hard not to fall into temptation....that's why we are often trying to pick ourselves up! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 9/28/2014 5:42:00 PM

Very clever one Paul! I hoped she took rejection well. Just kidding Paul. Lol ...you're a gent! Lol. I love your triole! Good luck in the contest! Love and light! Xxx D.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 9:59:00 AM

Thank you Dorian...talking of rejection....you still have not read the follow-up to this one yet:) Love and peace to you! /x/ paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 9/28/2014 4:13:00 PM

excellent! a difficult time to say no, so more power to you (or the fictional person in the poem)...

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 5:35:00 PM

Thank you Ilene. Your 'excellent' comment is much appreciated! Hindsight reveals a correct decision. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/28/2014 3:41:00 PM

This has a great message.Its so easy to be carried away by temptations at times.Saying no may even seem hard,but in the end ,doing what is moral and right would save our soul,and the 'other's ' soul,even if it might not save our heart.Fred is going to like this one,I am sure.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 5:31:00 PM

I agree wholeheartedly with your comments, Charm....even if it might not save our heart (you are very right!!). As the Maltese saying goes: jirnexxilek iggib il-bocca hdejn il-likk:) // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/28/2014 2:27:00 PM

Oh...how hard to say no, Paul. You are a man of integrity. Lovely write. Good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 2:48:00 PM

Eileen...there are times when a person has to say no...especially when age comes into it! Thank you for stopping by...missed your lovely presence and comments! // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/28/2014 2:21:00 PM

- The truth is often hard to bear .... it may hurt, but still the best Paul - Great written, luck in contest! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 2:42:00 PM

Hi Anne Lise! Glad you like this; it was inspired by a recollection of past years! hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 9/28/2014 1:44:00 PM

love and lust - i think Freddie will like this write Paul - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 2:42:00 PM

thank you its my first attempt:-) hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 2:38:00 PM

Thank you Jan. (Read your triolet and I was impressed!) hugs // paul