Glory

As you waved hand on that day and said goodbye glum dusk crashed heart. A feign of goodbye I uttered as I watched your back till the crepuscular veil swallowed you. A bit of stream dripped from my eyes evoked the memories of our deeds; some things we have done hand in hand. Your pleasant words you often offered and when you smiled, your plain white teeth I often stared at. My dearest child-hood friend It seems like you have not gone far it has been twenty years past Along my way back home I teetered because my mind was choked with countless thoughts Although twenty children never play for twenty years. I woke twice when I saw you in dream at nigh, I wonder if you have returned home However, those days had elapsed and my gratitude to HE for with misty grinning eyes we faced each other enchanting words while some had crossed the fence Glory----glory And glory

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Lydia Jerotich

Date: 11/13/2015 3:25:00 AM

When loved ones slip from our grip and take paths we cannot take....these exact feelings are arousen within us.... Beautiful composition AM.. Blessings!

A. Juman

Date: 10/19/2015 6:05:00 PM

Miss Z did the revision for you 2 days ago check you mail

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/19/2015 9:22:00 AM

FANTASTIC POEM~!~~ Adding this gem to my fav list.. Thanks... A7

Monterey Sirak

Date: 10/19/2015 7:49:00 AM

This is chock-full of deep feelings; grief, yearning. It leaves the reader feeling your sense of profound loss. A 7

Kp Nunez

Date: 10/17/2015 8:21:00 PM

This is better though again there are still some typo's. There is no denying your raw talent. One can feel the deep attachment between you and your buddy. Keep penning, AM. hugs!

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/17/2015 11:05:00 AM

This is truly excellent poetry so profound, leaves one thinking...

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/14/2015 8:04:00 PM

A profound piece to ponder Afolabi! This poem is very beautiful!

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/15/2015 11:51:00 AM

Your comment is a lot appreciated, thank you Connie.

Kp Nunez

Date: 10/14/2015 9:27:00 AM

What happened to the delta? Check your mail.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/15/2015 11:44:00 AM

Thank you dear poet....stay blessed

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 10/14/2015 6:45:00 AM

Excellent. Beautifully expressed poem. Enjoyed reading it. TFS

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/15/2015 11:49:00 AM

Thank you for dropped by to read and comment I really appreciate your kind heart.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/13/2015 10:45:00 PM

Impressive write... intriguing is some lines but its a great write~Olive Eloisa

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/14/2015 2:24:00 AM

Thanks for your comment it's really appreciated

A. Juman

Date: 10/13/2015 9:27:00 PM

Afo --my brother, deed is fine it just don't call out to me------- It makes every thing in the relationship look bad----- --that is why I suggested find another word ---Evoked the memories of our endeavors and sometimes agonizing struggles. ---------------For me I would not use deed unless it all bad

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/14/2015 5:27:00 AM

As you can see friend I clarified the kind of deeds, it makes it inline with my write.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/14/2015 2:22:00 AM

Thank you for your effort Friend it's a lot appreciated if we can all be doing like this we will all be wisest. thanks.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/14/2015 2:20:00 AM

Thank you for your effort Friend it's a lot appreciated if we can all be doing like this we will all be wisest. thanks.

A. Juman

Date: 10/13/2015 6:07:00 PM

Each enchanting words While some had jumped the fence -----this verse seems redundant or I just cant place it sorry

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 6:52:00 PM

You seem to not get my write Zaladin. As he embarked on the journey it evoked the memories of our deeds( many things we had done together as a friends, it is unaccountable). "HE" is GOD while the fence means " some had died" read this with your heart Zaladin I believe you will understand it more than you imagine. It mid night here okay....I'm in drowsy mood. Good night.

A. Juman

Date: 10/13/2015 6:04:00 PM

Afo- I don't like the word deeds. My gratitude to HE who guides for though he wipes not my misty-grinning eyes He guides me to mellow the haze in my lost. My gratitude To HE for with misty-grinning eyes we face the challenges day after day

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/13/2015 4:51:00 AM

Interesting work..Very descriptive and expressive..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 5:00:00 AM

Thank you SARA for your pleasant comment I really appreciate it.

A. Juman

Date: 10/13/2015 3:20:00 AM

Up at this time? Nigeria? I have lots and lots of Nigerian friends. Right now they are banned from coming to my home because a few came back from the hajj sick so I told every one 3 more weeks before they can come over

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 4:10:00 AM

A sad stuff you made me to remember Zaladin, but God can't do things without a way for glorification. I think that is right, but my brain only tend to understand it all... Is it for them to rest very well or not to cause you trouble? Enlightenment on that.

A. Juman

Date: 10/12/2015 8:42:00 PM

My friend you have a skill for writing but I cant read well and so I get lost trying to understand the essence of some of your compilation forgive me. crepuscular is OK I like that I did use it like that before. maybe I am jealous to see some one write in my style. Keep it up.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 2:39:00 AM

Thank you for dropped by Zaladin. I think the use analogy, metaphor, irony and others determine a good poem. I hope you would come back to re-read it because I have decoded it through my reply to comments. Thank you very much for the lesson I learnt from you reply to comment does a great thing in poem. Thanks.

John Loving Iii

Date: 10/12/2015 3:03:00 PM

I was mystified by the word crepuscular I rushed to look it up to see if it was used correctly. It was and perfectly. The twilight of someone disappearing in the sunset. Clever.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 2:25:00 AM

A well analyzed John. Thank you for your pleasant comment.

James Inman

Date: 10/12/2015 1:55:00 PM

Afolabi, very emotional reverie. You taught me a new word-crepuscular.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 2:26:00 AM

A great teacher in study is reading. Thanks.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 2:21:00 AM

Thank you James for shopping.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 10/12/2015 9:31:00 AM

Dear Afolabi Thank you for your review on my zombie poems they seem not liked that much by the views on them though so I'm debating on put the other four on today, so I'm not sure about putting them on, but I'm flattered by your sweet words of praise my friend, great job on your emotional write my friend it's sad and painful but put together very well, very inspirational thanks again you have a nice day, cheri

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 2:20:00 AM

Don't let others deed to suffocate your will Cheri, your write is extreme wise and excellent. I think that write should be made a film because it's perfectly written. I shall visit your page soon. Thanks for dropped by to read and comment to my poem.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/12/2015 5:39:00 AM

Painful experiences in life make us dig deeper into our soul thus we become wiser. A well expressed wealth of emotions, dear A.M.!

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 2:14:00 AM

Thank you Demetrio, your comment is as a result of my style...lol! That is why I used sometime to ask for critique and I still love it . You see, in my secondary school days I was in art class I used much of my time to read literature since then I've aimed to become a poet. Thank you very much for your pleasant comment I really appreciate it.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/12/2015 3:45:00 AM

Goodbyes are a fount of emotion, Afolabi! It's a good sign that in separation you manage to give glory and gratitude. // paul

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 1:55:00 AM

Thank you Paul, his goodbye throw at my heart a stone, this makes tears to roll a bit from my eyes as I remembered pleasant time we had spent together he's my intimate friend. Thank you for your comment I do appreciate it........A.M.

Michael Tor

Date: 10/11/2015 10:17:00 PM

Saying adios to a friend is sad. Nicely written Afolabi.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 1:57:00 AM

Thank you for your comment it is really appreciated.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/11/2015 8:02:00 PM

this is such a wistful sounding poem. I know we always talk in the US about the "glory days." Oh we miss those days and our dear friends!!

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 10:43:00 AM

I aimed to say commingled with extreme Andrea. Thanks for your comment.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 4:24:00 AM

Which our love mingled with extreme.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 1:15:00 AM

Glory be to the mighty Andrea....that day when he embarked on his journey it lodged in heart like a heavy meter as I gazed at his back till he's no longer seen. A childhood friend of mine which our mingle with extreme, but glory be to the mighty we are able to sight again with immense happiness while some of our age and those we are not of age had died. A glorification Andrea. Thanks for your pleasant words it is really appreciated.

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/11/2015 7:48:00 PM

The heart's glory begins when the fence stands in the background of passion's stride. This is the perfect poem showcasing your exciting and original thought form style Afolabi, its neat! J.A.B.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 12:59:00 AM

A wise comment from you Justin, there is no praise to Him after we had died, we had rather we praise Him while we are alive each time we think of his deeds over us. Thank you for your pleasant words it is appreciated.

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/11/2015 1:16:00 PM

Afolabi, I enjoyed the read this morning. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/13/2015 12:43:00 AM

Thank you very much for dropped to read and comment to my page.