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On glossy sand, frilly dresses rolled Lovely the outlines in bright décor; As they murmured where pristine crest gushed Not knowing this beach would lie quiet. Moments ebb as I stroll down the lake Remembering their chuckles, ablaze; Like early moon’s glint through summers’ play Yet the girl with blooms hushed modestly. The other grasped a red parasol; Quivering with June’s mist’s fragrances While her dear friend donned a bonnet blue, Yet moans of young wishes crushed fine hours . Neither rocks could stop them, not the tide Though she in blue, had to live afar... Alone, I droop on a red-blue shore… While fingers stroke a portrait of tears. Contest: The Red Parasol by Alfred Glendening Sponsor: Eve Roper 7/2/2016

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Date: 7/12/2016 12:26:00 AM
Well done excellent write!!
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Date: 7/8/2016 5:21:00 PM
Congrats! on the win nette...well done...^WW^
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Date: 7/8/2016 4:53:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your nice placement in 'the red parasol' contest! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 7/8/2016 9:20:00 AM
Nette, beautifully expressed and penned lady. My favorite line is, "Like early moon’s glint through summers’ play Yet the girl with blooms hushed modestly. perfectly written...congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
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Date: 7/8/2016 9:17:00 AM
As always, I enjoyed your imagery and the lovely, unique ways you can turn words. Beautiful.
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Date: 7/8/2016 8:48:00 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/3/2016 8:03:00 PM
Hello there dear poet, love how you pulled the pristine out of the frame and placed it so eloquently on this slip... beautiful Nette... missed you girly... have a beautiful holiday vacation.. much love, james
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Date: 7/3/2016 3:44:00 AM
A masterful painting of the portrait with words. Good luck dear, nette.
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Date: 7/3/2016 12:16:00 AM
Very creative, I can say, is as if the poem inspired the painting and not the other way around! Beautiful!
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Date: 7/2/2016 2:00:00 PM
Since i am sucker for light tearjerkers, your astounding poem gave me chills. A 7 it is !
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Date: 7/2/2016 1:56:00 PM
The pensive imagery of this poem is remarkable. You painted a very vivid picture with your words with a sad turn in the end.
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Date: 7/2/2016 8:40:00 AM
- Beautiful words to a beautiful picture - woven together into a perfect work of art - Good luck in the contest, Nette - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/2/2016 6:33:00 AM
Lovely as always, nette. That last line is to die for! You, paint with words though, not tears and I am a fan. Good luck in the contest.
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