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From a Cafe Table

In this hour they called it the French lace minutes the sound of autumn leaves falling unbearable to the ear I slip out in the echoing space between now and then it's an insect like feeling that buzzes around too fast to be recognized then a coat slides to the ground heels are clapping hands with wooden floor ashtrays are laid to rest and on a bus ticket my pen is scribbling you are here you are here you are here © Gry W Christensen

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/7/2017 7:14:00 PM
Ahh yes, came back to read this gem again my friend. This is the one that first awed me.
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Date: 10/6/2014 6:10:00 PM
wow, I do not do this kind of writing too much but I just love reading it . It's difficult for me to write this way and I appreciate seeing someone who can do free verse well. Love this.
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Gry Christensen
Date: 10/6/2014 6:57:00 PM
Hi Andrea, thank you very much for your kind words! Free verse seems to be the "easiest" form for me somehow. Best always, Gry
Date: 9/30/2014 2:48:00 AM
Welcome to ouf family dear Gry. Delightful! Very descriptive and lively!
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Gry Christensen
Date: 10/2/2014 12:17:00 AM
Hi Demetrios! Thank you you so much both for the welcome and your kind comment upon my poem. Much appreciated.
Date: 9/29/2014 9:33:00 AM
Great if u can jot down such poetic muse on a bus ride. I too like to cary mini note pads for the purpose. Kudos for a super poem. Nice to read u again poet!
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Gry Christensen
Date: 9/29/2014 12:44:00 PM
Not on a bus ride; at a cafe table. :) Thanks so much for finding my poem, reading it and leaving me such a nice feedback. Bus tickets have always worked as great note pads to me. Happy to see you again!
Date: 9/26/2014 4:57:00 PM
Very well-done Gry!! Glad to be transported to the Bus Ride via your narrative. Enjoyed it immensely. I will become one of your regular readers. Cheers and All the Best, Gary
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Gry Christensen
Date: 9/29/2014 12:57:00 PM
Hi Gary, Thanks a lot for your very positive words! I am very grateful you like it, as most of it was composed on bus tickets at a cafe. Thank you for wishing to follow me as well, that means a lot to hear. Have a great week.
Date: 9/25/2014 9:30:00 PM
Your free verse is always inspiring to read. That ending is solid gold too. Bravooooooo!!!! Giving this one a solid 7..
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Gry Christensen
Date: 9/26/2014 2:49:00 PM
Hello Robert Thanks so much for those nice words, I'm very happy if my writes are inspiring.
Date: 9/25/2014 6:17:00 PM
You take the reader with you between your now and then on that bus ride of romance .I love how it ends- Beautiful!!
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Gry Christensen
Date: 9/25/2014 6:51:00 PM
Hei Charmaine, I am glad you enjoyed this. Thank you!

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