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Blending in so beautifully in the endless everglades The heron waits patiently The warm wind ripples the water He waits regally Standing still like a statue in silent blue waters He waits hungrily Catching his first fish of the day No more waiting - he dines like a king Inspired by Majestic Pose 3~11~15 Contest Florida Nature never judges Submitted to Premiere Contest #13 sponsored by Skat

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 3/12/2015 1:42:00 PM

Brilliant write Jan, I love it.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/12/2015 1:43:00 PM

Thanks Armand - I simply can't stop smiling seeing you back and commenting:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus

Date: 3/12/2015 11:30:00 AM

You do this visual justice, Jan....very serene. Love the repetition, it brings out the desired effect. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/12/2015 11:35:00 AM

Thanks Paul for your lovely comment - I thought I should work more on the poem but will leave it as it is now :-) Hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/12/2015 8:04:00 AM

beautiful imagery plus beautiful words.. :)! God bless you always sweet Jan.. :)...olive eloisa

Jan Allison
Date: 3/12/2015 8:13:00 AM

Thanks so much for dropping by Olive:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/11/2015 8:46:00 PM

So beautiful! Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 3/12/2015 5:22:00 AM

Aww thanks Arthur:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/11/2015 6:41:00 PM

i love the repetition you've used here, jan - it's very effective!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 6:45:00 PM

Thanks Ilene - I wrote it before dad died - I thought I would expand on it but have left it as it was:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2015 6:22:00 PM

I was thinking you chose some kind of a new form that repeated the way the heron waited. I just love patterns in one's stanzas. Great ending on it. well, I am DONE and gotta get home to Joe now. See ya, jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 6:27:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I do apprecaite your feedback - I couldn't post it as couplets as it doesn't rhyme so went with free verse:-) Hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 3/11/2015 3:48:00 PM

Having been there I could state that the image is perfect as well as the verse dear, Jan! Good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 3:53:00 PM

Thank you SO much Demetrios! Hugs Jan xx

William Gray

Date: 3/11/2015 3:41:00 PM

Lovely piece Jan!. Best Wishes my friend!.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 3:43:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by William:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/11/2015 3:04:00 PM

how graceful is your work, jan.. so pleasing!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 3:10:00 PM

Thanks Nette I am not 100 happy with it yet - I will improve it if I have time:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 3/11/2015 1:03:00 PM

If it wasn't for souls like yourself we wouldn’t have the eyes see such beauty in nature. Emile. #7

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 1:13:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words Emile - I think I could work further on the poem I wrote it before dad died just got round to posting it - may alter it a bit if I have time and inclination:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nicole Ussery

Date: 3/11/2015 8:39:00 AM

The poem is smooth,not to rough.It tells a story behind the words of you.Shall your poems stay in mind.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 8:46:00 AM

Thanks so much Nicole for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 3/11/2015 8:16:00 AM

I like it! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2015 8:17:00 AM

Thanks Cas - I have given the contest a go that's the main thing:-) Hugs Jan xx