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A ferocious sky rattles overhead, Gathering a vault in electric red As lightning of fire grills my night, aloud Like a mad howl piercing edges of cloud. Rapid the hours’ flush deepening a smear When sudden gusts of blatant winds appear, To assail road gridlock with their harsh course A power so defined without remorse. Moments pass while the downdraft twirls around In vicious frenzy of its breaking ground; That currents rise against a murky dye And treetops bow in need of dire reply. Until slowly, wind and sky alter trails Enlivening boughs as clear coast prevails… From the highway, I find guideposts of peace, Calm at last from my inner angst’s release. --------------- 8. 15. 2016 Wordscapes Contest of John Hamilton ----------------------- ~ Just after a storm last week, we experienced another 3 days of thunderstorm , strong winds , and cloudy skies over Manila and regions . This Monday, classes were suspended due to heightened winds and unbearable traffic jams as the weather lightened early evening. --------------- Photo credits to www.automolgy.com

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Date: 8/21/2016 3:25:00 AM
A claustrophobic's nightmare Nette. Your poem brilliantly conveys the havoc the weather causes! 7 ; )
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Date: 8/18/2016 10:48:00 AM
Beautifully penned Nette... Congrats on your win...
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Date: 8/18/2016 8:20:00 AM
Can only stare at the spectacle of nature at such times.Beautifully written Nette!
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Date: 8/17/2016 10:24:00 PM
Excellent poem, enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 8/17/2016 9:53:00 PM
Great poem, just the right touch, just excellent, Thanks Nette!
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Date: 8/16/2016 1:45:00 PM
A 7 for this dramatically descriptive piece, Nette--great use of figures of speech! Janice
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Date: 8/16/2016 5:50:00 AM
Captivating and amazingly beautiful writing dear, nette. A seven!
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Date: 8/15/2016 11:24:00 PM
Beautiful, it sounded like nature against man! I am glad we had a reprieve! :) But that traffic on my.................. :)
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Date: 8/15/2016 8:04:00 PM
Great description of the bad weather it seems to be going on a lot good luck in the contest! Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/15/2016 3:13:00 PM
A very vivd descriptive write Nette - sounds absoliutely terrifying in all aspects with the storm and bulid up of traffic. Stay safe Nette!! :-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/15/2016 2:49:00 PM
Sure wouldn't want to get caught in that traffic! A very vivid description of a tornado/thunderstorm, nette. No matter how many you've seen, they are always a scary sight. Glad you are OK.
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Date: 8/15/2016 1:39:00 PM
The feeling of eerie anticipation is vivid and powerful in this gripping poem. Did you have an earthquake too? Be safe, please.
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Date: 8/15/2016 1:21:00 PM
I saw there was a tornado. Hope everyone is ok...wonderful write nette
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Date: 8/15/2016 1:18:00 PM
very creative !nice write up.
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Date: 8/15/2016 12:49:00 PM
I saw bits of this scene on TV. Eloquent poetry stirring fury of wind and sky on monsoon days, brilliant woman!
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Manny Paras
Date: 8/15/2016 12:50:00 PM
You get a 7!
Date: 8/15/2016 12:38:00 PM
- I'd been terrified !!!! - ....... So many cars !!! ... on the highway ... Geez .... maybe I've seen 30-35 cars today - Wonderful written, Nette - Good luck in the contest - Take care of yourself - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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