Duplex

An Honest Man Christmas Eve and he is rushing home with gifts for his wife in bad traffic. He texts “Dying to get home.” Then nothing. His wife, not far away, and some minutes later, can hear sirens. He was always true to his word. For Jan's Duplex Form Contest: 2 syllables per line

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Jennifer Walker

Date: 12/12/2016 6:41:00 AM

As soon as the word texting I knew what was going to happen. Sad write but well penned.

Afzal Nusker

Date: 12/11/2016 11:32:00 AM

Oh no, such a tragic ending. It hurts!

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/11/2016 4:55:00 AM

Hi Andrea, It's no suprise seeing you on the top of the list! Congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Darren White

Date: 12/10/2016 11:54:00 PM

Aww. This is chillingly good, and has also a very dar sense of humor. Melikes. Congratulations!

Joseph May

Date: 12/10/2016 10:45:00 PM

Congrats on the win Andrea

Sushma A. Singh

Date: 12/10/2016 10:20:00 PM

Literally texting himself to death! Congrats!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/10/2016 7:52:00 PM

Coming back with congrats on your win!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/10/2016 7:28:00 PM

Congrats, Andrea, on your top win!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/10/2016 6:57:00 PM

Oh my, that was quite the shock. Well done Andrea.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/10/2016 6:26:00 PM

Hey Andrea Your poem sends out a serious message but I love the wit in the title and at the end of the poem:-) Many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 12/10/2016 10:23:00 AM

Never text while driving but how often do you see that happening. Good luck on the contest. love phyl

Mark Martin

Date: 12/10/2016 12:29:00 AM

Can see this as a TV infomercial ending with someone saying in a sombre serious voice "don't text and drive". Can picture the ambulance and the husband being taken away in a stretcher. Really good poem! Good luck in the contest! :-)

Daver Austin

Date: 12/9/2016 11:21:00 AM

No, no, no! Do not text while driving. Good one, Andrea. Love, daver

Tamal Kundu

Date: 12/9/2016 10:02:00 AM

That last stanza brings the entire poem so wonderfully together. Good luck, Andrea!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/9/2016 7:40:00 AM

Oh, just as you said, fun, but truly sad:) well done, Andrea:) Jan's going to have quite a tough time choosing the winners, every entry I've read so far is excellent:) thank God, I don't have to judge contests, ha ha;)

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 12/9/2016 2:45:00 AM

Brilliant and emotional x sad few words but leaving an impact on the heart x

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/8/2016 8:19:00 PM

WoW! Andrea, you did great with this form. It had intrigue and suspence. The twist at the end was sad. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Joseph May

Date: 12/8/2016 5:45:00 PM

The double entendre adds a touch of mystery to the ending...Nicely written Andrea...

Paul Callus

Date: 12/8/2016 2:42:00 PM

A serious poem written with a touch of wit, Andrea...the right blend that will catch Jan's attention! Regards // paul

Matthew Anish

Date: 12/8/2016 2:21:00 PM

Sweet holiday words here. I have my electric menorah ready for Chanukah - which I always celebrate! Best of the season to you and yours - and please let me know when you have receive my chapbook. Peace & Love Matthew Ani

Deborah Dambani

Date: 12/8/2016 10:14:00 AM

Gosh!...tragic

Paloma P

Date: 12/8/2016 9:44:00 AM

Darkly affecting, ouch that hurt Andrea. Good luck, sounds like a winner to me!

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 12/7/2016 11:56:00 PM

Excellent. Very dark write and cleverly done. Enjoyed reading it . Thanks for sharing it.

Janis Thompson

Date: 12/7/2016 9:41:00 PM

Wow, this takes you away. It's very sad and a warning against texting and driving. More people should see this poem.

Vera Duggan

Date: 12/7/2016 9:04:00 PM

Andrea, nice little verse and in my mind very clever, as Agnes said loved the word play at the end, didn't expect that, good luck in the contest and take care.....Vera