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'dear Prudence'

Hell breaks loose through the trusting door Whining its splintering, wooden hinges Claws wrapping onto the arches beyond Gnarled feet pressed on the threshold Lower limbs jingling with sparky anklets Ready to catapult and kick with spitting mouth To shove its shine like a worthy prick It was time for her daily purges Peace is slapped about in her fickle hands and made ragged Turmoil in her pedicured toes erodes the smoothed surfaces Of the fashions’ must, into dusty rust of sick disgust Her coral lips curve in delight At the sight of confused and crazy creatures Staring numbly at her hell-bent sight She is always laughing, snarling or lying low Waiting for the climatic blow Bottom dwelling, blush smearer Eyeliner runner, nail-biting binger Her lies tease and her eyes see a perfect she will never be As her large, curved nails glimmer She scuttles her way like a crab in a salty delirium She hides her hiss like a snake ready to miss for a chase Challenging practicality, “Dear Prudence, Won’t you come out to play?” But we are silent to the accursed The wise are wary and rehearsed We all slip right through as she intrudes an empty room Waiting for a reaction, screwing with the lights to assert a distraction She wreaks havoc in the dark, “Dear Prudence!” She screams, As we softly walk down the path, nomads against the crabs She doesn’t realize she is her worst fear—alone Her mask melting and her anklets snapping Collapsing, the tears she squeezed for her high Were emptied, vindicated and dried Angrily she must realize In her twisted, stubborn way It’s a beautiful day… A crazy collab with my brother David Breidenthal [J.W Earnings]

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 3/16/2016 2:19:00 PM
Congratulations to both of you on this deserving POTD!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/16/2016 6:43:00 PM
Thanks Connie! ( : ~Laura
Date: 3/16/2016 2:04:00 AM
Congrats to the both of you,,great imagery..You have a new fan
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/16/2016 6:43:00 PM
Awww, thanks Jai. I greatly appreciate the comment, and I'll be checkin out some of your poetry! ~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 10:16:00 PM
Every crab has it's cake...this poem is a wonderful display of your alliterative and rhyming skills David and Laura...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/16/2016 6:42:00 PM
Nicely said, Justin! Thanks for readin'! A wonderful display of weirdness I'd say! ;)~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 3:24:00 PM
- A great poem from you and your brother - Congratulations 2 U 2 ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 8:20:00 PM
Aww, thank you Anne. Glad to have you stop by. You're such a cheerful poet! ~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 12:59:00 PM
First congrats on the POTD and second, what a visually, capturing write! Visionary words! Do Write On...Write On!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 1:09:00 PM
Thanks for the sweet comment Walter! ~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 11:36:00 AM
Great! grats on poem of the day you two! ;) :)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 12:11:00 PM
: D Thank ya!~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 9:24:00 AM
A captivating read! Congrats on POTD! ~Cindi
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 9:28:00 AM
Thanks Cindi (: ~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 7:01:00 AM
Powerful imagery, Laura! Congratulations on poem of the day!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 7:49:00 AM
Pretty crazy stuff (: Thanks! ~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 6:14:00 AM
Congratulations for POTD Great write
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 7:48:00 AM
Many thanks, Charlie! ~Laura
Date: 3/15/2016 5:10:00 AM
Well written Laura. I enjoyed the images that you formed. Verlena
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 7:48:00 AM
Thanks very much, Verlena! ~Laura
Date: 3/14/2016 6:14:00 AM
Very profound images that touch the heart and soul of the reader! Excellent collaboration! A seven to each dear, Laura!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 6:19:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, Demetrios!~Laura
Date: 3/14/2016 1:14:00 AM
Wonderful imagination Laura,,.,..I really enjoyed this collaboration . You have enriched this piece with rich imagery ...7/7..Just brilliant !!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:49:00 AM
<3 Thanks Red. We really appreciate it. ~Laura
Date: 3/14/2016 12:44:00 AM
Prudence as a monster with claws ... and sparkly anklets. You really went places with the personification. It was a crazy piece. But also entertaining and powerful. I adored your last three lines. How often do we whimper and fear over nothing, and then with hesitation admit, that it was nothing ... and in fact ... it's beautiful! Super imaginative, Laura.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:46:00 AM
Thanks Timothy. David and I come up with some weird stuff it seems. Haha. I appreciate your thoughts. ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 3:05:00 PM
Very powerful write by the two of you. The imagery you evoked was real and...scary! Great job.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:42:00 AM
Thanks, Eileen. We had a lot of fun writing this together. I had to make the best of my spring break. Haha. Yeah, this one's a weird one. At times my brother read a line I would come up with, and he'd make a face like, "you're not my sister...."XD but we wanted the antagonist to just be creepy and over the top. ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 2:19:00 PM
I found this to be both dark and sensuous in a sexually explicit sort of sort of way. Definite tints of "Shades of Grey". I really did enjoy this read, Laura...Best poem I have read tonight! My very best regards...And warmest wishes. :) john
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:40:00 AM
There's definitely a sexualness to the character...when she plays, she harms...even, blindingly, herself. Describing her we wanted her to be familiar, but in a appalling, scary way. Thank you sweet John. ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 9:45:00 AM
You both did this very well, lots of imagery! Impressive writing.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:34:00 AM
Thank you, Richard. it was a crazy one - thanks for sticking with it to the end.~Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 8:41:00 AM
Very complex write of intriguing lines and metaphores, reads well and entertains in a " guess what's next" kind of way, many good solid lines that clearly reflect a talent for words, and you wear them well....nice intense write...well done...Ian
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:32:00 AM
Ian, thank you for your super sweet comments lately. David and I were adamant about the metaphors. "metaphor the hell out of it," he said. I said, can do. Now what's the first line...? ;) <3 Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 7:38:00 AM
That was amazing, it was like a war waged between life and death, good and bad etc. etc. Very well done marking it a fav poem
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 1:30:00 AM
Thanks Brian, I really appreciate the comment and for reading. The good, the smart, ain't got time for that mess! ~Laura

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