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Could Have Been a Perfect Day

Lips wet with dew kissed my sad face Knowing eyes covered in black lace A soul departs without a trace Returns to grace, returns to grace I hold her hand as we both pray Beneath a tree as it's bows sway If not for death a perfect day He went away, he went away I question yet no answers come All turn to dust when life is done I'm so lost here with everyone I want to run, I want to run Monotetra Contest Third poem I wrote I was a little unclear on the rules, I hope I got it right with this one. One of my close friends Died at 18 in a motorcycle accident. I dedicate this one to Hosea Cardos.

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Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/11/2013 6:33:00 PM

The loss and love so deeply felt. The excellent title and poetry form suits the lines perfectly. Peaceful feeling under the tree, what could have otherwise been a perfect day. Congratulations on your win :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/11/2013 6:51:00 PM

Thanks Karen.

Audrey Haick

Date: 7/10/2013 9:01:00 PM

Well done, Richard.I feel the pain yet there's hope within. So sorry about your friend, Hosea.... RIP. Congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/11/2013 6:09:00 AM

Yes there is hope. Thanks

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/9/2013 9:38:00 PM

Congrats In Kim's "Monotetra" contest....take care...LINDA

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/10/2013 7:12:00 AM

Thanks Linda.

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 7/9/2013 2:55:00 PM

A great poem to reread and think about for a while. Some great truths lie hidden among these verses. My time was well rewarded.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/9/2013 5:40:00 PM

Thanks Isaiah.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 7/9/2013 11:46:00 AM

A lovely dedication for your friend and a great win. Love, Joyce

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/9/2013 5:41:00 PM

Thanks Joyce

Kim Merryman

Date: 7/9/2013 11:36:00 AM

Richard, a heartfelt, emotional piece. Well done! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/10/2013 8:07:00 AM

Thanks Kim

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/9/2013 11:22:00 AM

Danger things those motorcycles :( Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/10/2013 8:07:00 AM

Thanks Debbie

Debbie Knapp

Date: 6/26/2013 6:56:00 PM

Sad but nice of you to write this for your friend.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/26/2013 8:39:00 PM

Thanks Debbie

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 6/26/2013 11:18:00 AM

Such a tragedy dying so young, sorry you had to go through that at such a young age Rick. Touching tribute to your friend. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/26/2013 8:41:00 PM

Yes it was, he had such promise, spoke three languages great personality very intelligent. It was tough for all his friends and family.

Poet Tacito

Date: 6/25/2013 7:20:00 AM

Huge respect to you for this personal piece.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/25/2013 7:26:00 AM

Thanks Drake

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/24/2013 5:44:00 PM

Death...be not proud though some have called thee mighty and dreadful...One short sleep past...we wake eternally...Death thou shalt die. The first and last lines of one of my favorite poems by John Donne. Give it a read...it comforts me. Lovely poem...birthed from painful memories....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/25/2013 7:24:00 AM

Very appropriate and meaningful scripture. Thanks

Colleen Bono

Date: 6/24/2013 10:08:00 AM

sounds good here to.Still pretty sick and might have to go in for iv antibiotics.2 years ago I was in for 62 days.Trying to stay strong.Colleen

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/25/2013 7:26:00 AM

You remain in my prayers Colleen. Today is a good day to take a step towards feeling better. Hugs Rick

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/24/2013 10:08:00 AM

What a dramatic day for Man, what a glorious day for the soul! Beautiful poem, only those of us who have been through such an experience may understand what you lived! A worthy monument for your friend it is this creation of yours!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/25/2013 7:23:00 AM

Thanks so much Demetrios, I always appreciate your kind words and visits.

April Gabriella

Date: 6/23/2013 6:13:00 PM

Lovely poem. The emotion is definitely there. Great job!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2013 6:28:00 PM

Thanks April