Caves

In your cave Resides electricity If I like it Where is my fault In your cave Smiles blue ocean Where is my fault If I take some salt In your cave Dwells deep night Where is my fault If I seek single malt From your cave We go for the glow For the dance of stars We go back to night Cave is our beginning Cave is our survival Cave is our garden Cave our destination _______________________________ August 3, 2016

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Dave Timperley

Date: 8/12/2016 6:26:00 AM

Why do you worry that this is not to others liking Probir? It is to YOUR liking or you would not have posted it.On here we share some of our innermost thoughts and it is up to the reader to seek their own interpretation. As for me I like it. God Bless. D.

Space Cadet
Date: 8/23/2016 5:29:00 PM

Very cavernous; I continue to read and enjoy your verse. w

Probir Gupta
Date: 8/12/2016 12:44:00 PM

You are right. Thank you ...

Vandana Sharma

Date: 8/4/2016 5:28:00 AM

Our body itself is a cave and its up to us whether we make it holy or let it be as it is..............

Probir Gupta
Date: 8/4/2016 7:02:00 AM

As you would like to interpret ... Thank you ...

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 8/4/2016 4:16:00 AM

I like this poem. It is indeed circular and yet there is a lot of room for emotion and interpretation. Good stuff.

Probir Gupta
Date: 8/4/2016 4:24:00 AM

Thank you ...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/3/2016 4:01:00 PM

In such a Cave all is beautiful all is permitted all is blessed and you are faultless my friend, Probir! Enjoy!

Probir Gupta
Date: 8/3/2016 11:15:00 PM

Thank you so much Demetrios ...This poem, it seems, has not gone well with soup friends ... This is wholly a symbolical writing ... We do perceive our emotions in the variety of out-of-the-cave vast world. But it is in the cave that we recollect them in a dark-yet-starry tranquility. Hence the cave.