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Perched high atop a secluded tor Lies the ancient Castle of Paramour A romantic location hidden from sight For a rendezvous at the dead of night Where two lovers meet for a secret tryst Their passions rise like the morning mist But no one must discover that they ever meet For both are married, so they must be discrete They are unaware there is a heavy price to pay Once over the threshold… forever they must stay Trapped in the castle for the rest of their life Their infidelity brings them eternal strife Perched high atop a secluded tor Lies the ancient Castle of Paramore Beware of the risk should you enter the door. Contest Castle on a Hill Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron 04~22~16

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/18/2021 12:46:00 AM

This has a haunted yet and enchanted feeling to it Jan. Very lovely! Congratulations on your wonderful win. Blessings xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/18/2021 5:40:00 PM

Thanks Connie i am going through my older poems and have found lots to go in Brian's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/1/2016 5:53:00 PM

Jan,, Congratulations on your castle on a hill win... love Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 4/18/2021 5:39:00 PM

thanks Linda :-) hugs Jan xx

Moon Flower

Date: 4/28/2016 8:22:00 AM

That was a deserving win, Jan. Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/28/2016 10:12:00 AM

Thanks so much Moon flower:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/27/2016 4:42:00 PM

Hi Jan, I enjoyed your write. Congratulations on your fine placement in the 'castles' contest. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 4/28/2016 10:11:00 AM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 4/27/2016 2:00:00 PM

Congratulations on this one, Jan. Well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 4:03:00 PM

Many thanks Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/27/2016 1:49:00 PM

Cute little tale. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 1:59:00 PM

Thanks so much Joyce:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/27/2016 1:33:00 PM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 1:59:00 PM

Thanks Joseph - lovely new avatar - so beautiful an image:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/27/2016 1:03:00 PM

Congrats on your win with placement my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 1:58:00 PM

Thanks as ever BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 4/27/2016 12:57:00 PM

Jan, a lovely poem for the contest, congrats on your placement :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 1:58:00 PM

thanks LuLoo - lovely pic of you and Nick:-):-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 4/27/2016 12:43:00 PM

Congratulations Jan on the placement of the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 1:57:00 PM

Many thanks for a great contest Nayda - love the stunning spring flowers on your blog:-) hugs jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 4/27/2016 9:55:00 AM

Hi Jan, your words once more entrance the reader. Yes, once on the road of infidelity it is a trap forever caught in. I followed this one line by line, caught up in your wonderful tale. There are so many traps layed out in the garden of life. A strange castle indeed that does hold the unfaithful behind its walls. An excellent take on the theme Jan. I could see this one doing well in the contest. Good luck. This has to be a 7 and it is a fave. I just Love the flow of the piece. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 4/27/2016 10:04:00 AM

Thanks so much Mike - I think the poem is pretty dark and sad- so much pain is caused by infidelity and often there is no turning back and everything is lost:-( hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/23/2016 12:43:00 PM

Beautiful poem read from you. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 4/23/2016 4:42:00 PM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/23/2016 7:25:00 AM

The price that one risks to pay for infidelity! Captivating writing dear, Jan! Good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/23/2016 4:42:00 PM

Thanks Demetrios sadly there is often a massive price to pay:-( hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/23/2016 5:22:00 AM

A different take on the theme:) all the best:)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/23/2016 6:32:00 AM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/22/2016 10:43:00 PM

Splendid write, a winner!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/23/2016 6:33:00 AM

Just remember once you book in you can never get out ... and the food may be crap lol:-) hugs jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 4/22/2016 4:52:00 PM

Interesting and mysterious piece Jan, nicely penned, blessings and hugs, Gordon

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 4:53:00 PM

I have no idea where this came from lol... I do worry about my muse Gordon - I just have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs jan xx

Duncan Chappell

Date: 4/22/2016 3:11:00 PM

Great write Jan much love xx

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 3:15:00 PM

Thanks Duncan:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/22/2016 3:11:00 PM

- A lot of history behind high walls - A great poem, Jan - Good luck in the contest! - hugs // Sun :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 3:14:00 PM

Thanks Anne lise - not somewhere I will ever be booking into lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/22/2016 2:50:00 PM

The castle of love ...or of love that shouldn't be....Very nicely penned Jan...Thanks for stopping by I enjoyed your comments...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 2:51:00 PM

Thanks Jospeh - I think this is one castle to be avoided - i certainly won't be booking in lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 4/22/2016 11:55:00 AM

Different style for you, Jan but enjoyable read.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 11:59:00 AM

I love to write humouorus poems but I have posted many serious poems on here too :-) hugs Jan xx

J. Tudor

Date: 4/22/2016 11:45:00 AM

I'm so used to your humour, I wasn't expecting this! Nice twist on the contest. J.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 11:55:00 AM

Thanks J Tudor I do surprise people occasionally and write a more serious type of poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 4/22/2016 11:23:00 AM

Beautiful Jan..:)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 11:28:00 AM

Thanks LuLoo - but I guess it's not such a good place to visit though lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 4/22/2016 8:17:00 AM

oh very good jan : stephen

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2016 8:18:00 AM

Thanks Stephen - I've not idea where the inspiration came from lol:-) hugs jan xx