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Carry Grief As a Shield

Release relief, however brief- Let it come to crush my grief! I can't go on when Hope is gone; Biting Life with softened teeth Why ponder things that make no sense, Why take my Mind to clean and rinse; To wash away a long decay (And left with no defense) * "Grief" contest entry

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Robin Davis

Date: 11/21/2013 6:02:00 PM

Chan The Man I can feel the grief in this poem from beginning to end. You captured how grief can affect us in many ways. Nice job my friend Thanks for the insightful and nice comment on my Devil Games. poem

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 11/22/2013 4:50:00 AM

Thanks, Sweet Pea; I appreciate the read and review <3

Skat A

Date: 10/4/2013 9:17:00 PM

nice win..........SKAT

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/5/2013 6:23:00 AM

Thanks, hon! :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/2/2013 2:36:00 PM

"Why ponder things that make no sense"... I couldn't agree more! I love that line and the entire poem! Terrific work, BP! :) Congratulations on your win!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/3/2013 3:26:00 AM

Thanks, SP! Congrats on BOTH your wins; that's awesome :D

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/2/2013 8:26:00 AM

finely penned poem, congrats on your win :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/2/2013 8:46:00 AM

Thanks, Sanda; I appreciate it :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/2/2013 4:56:00 AM

Congrats on the win in the contest,

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/2/2013 5:25:00 AM

Thanks for letting me know I placed, Doc, and thanks for the comment! :)

Jon A Cavanaugh

Date: 9/13/2013 11:45:00 AM

I been reading several of your recent poems. They are all wonderful. You are a very talented poet.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/13/2013 11:55:00 AM

Thank you again, Jon. These are all very old pieces that I happened upon while I was plundering the attic looking for an old VHS tape. I didn't even remember writing them. I'm happy you enjoy my work :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 9/12/2013 8:41:00 PM

If this is one of the older pieces you talked about, it shines just like the rest. Great from beginning to end. "Release relief, however brief, Let it come to crush my grief! " ALL fantastic lines

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/13/2013 10:04:00 AM

It is one of my lost children from ages ago. I think the first four lines are good, but the last four I think are a little weaker. I really should have reworked it some. Line 5 is somewhat trite sounding and brings down the quality, I think. But something compelled me to post "as is" lol ;)

Wayne Hill

Date: 9/12/2013 2:43:00 PM

A very clever use of words......I see greatness here.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/12/2013 3:25:00 PM

I am deeply flattered, Wayne. Thank you for taking time to read and reply; I very much appreciate it :)