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Can You Feel It

I have spent, a lifetime, being calm___________cool collected---afraid to show the darkness! U n a w a r e, of the freedom, that comes from releasing the beast, no longer muzzling the dog!!!! Growling low, from deep in my chest, fists clenched and released, red flush in my face and chest. I feed off your fear, as you look into my eyes, you my tormentor SURPRISED as you watch me rise. Big man, see my new found addiction, I'm in a heightened state, no longer afraid, an uncontained contradiction. Interruption, between heart and brain, moving from soft spoken to someone I can't explain! Powerful emotion, to me my weakness personified, letting my self completely go, spectating from deep inside. ANGER e r u p t s, fifty four years of playing the stamp collecting game, I'm the one at fault but others think you're to BLAME! Written October 29, 2015 By: Richard Lamoureux For Casarah's Dancing with description contest. Note: this is eight lines stylized for visual effect.

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Lu Loo

Date: 11/10/2015 2:53:00 PM

Amazing Richard and congrats in the contest! Well deserved win :) -LU xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Laura.;0)

Carrie Richards

Date: 11/10/2015 2:27:00 PM

You intensified the feeling of pent up anger, by your placement of sentences and layout of words....... We can feel it building .....it truly has the effect you were seeking, Richard! Well done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Carrie, I'm glad it has the desired effect.

Skat A

Date: 11/10/2015 11:35:00 AM

Hi Richard, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT

James Inman

Date: 11/10/2015 8:08:00 AM

Love the flow suggested by layout. the words are strong well thought out. Great write Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 3:21:00 PM

Thanks James. Much appreciated.

Michael Tor

Date: 11/10/2015 12:51:00 AM

Richard congratulations on your well written write!!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 6:22:00 AM

Thanks Michael

Viv Wigley

Date: 11/9/2015 10:17:00 PM

Love the way this fizzes like a fuse and then goes off at the end, Richard. Great work, and congrats! Regards, Viv

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 12:38:00 AM

Thanks Viv.

Lin Lane

Date: 11/9/2015 7:43:00 PM

Well written, Richard. Congrats!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 12:37:00 AM

Thanks Lin.

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/9/2015 5:43:00 PM

Wow...powerful, Richard. Congrats on your fine win. Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/10/2015 12:37:00 AM

Thanks Sandra.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/7/2015 6:34:00 PM

Wham and Bam! I love hard punching poems and this is one! Very good and good luck! ... CayCay (my son calls me Mama Bear - I love seeing that)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/7/2015 6:45:00 PM

Have you introduced yourself to my mom? I got her on here writing and she is quite good at it. Thanks again for reading a group of my poems. I appreciate your thoughtful visits.

Mama Bear

Date: 11/3/2015 4:59:00 PM

Memories of Italy You did this well. Glad you contain yourself not like your old mom Love you

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/3/2015 6:50:00 PM

That was a fun trip! I love you too.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 11/1/2015 5:57:00 PM

Dear Richard Powerful my fellow souper, emotions can be a tramplin of expressionism well done here my friend, I believe you have a marvelous chance of winning with this splended piece here, and glad you enjoyed my Batty Gable, she is a cool lady, lol thanks again, cheri

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:00:00 PM

I hope you are right Cherl, I had to dig deep to do this one Justice. Thanks for your kind comment.

Elis Artis

Date: 11/1/2015 5:25:00 PM

Well expressed! I love how you captured this emotion, I can relate because I have anger issues myself. I even bought a punching bag and joined a boxing gym just to get it all out without hurting others or myself. This is a masterpiece +7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:02:00 PM

Hello Artis, those are good coping skill you are developing. To master ones emotions is the path to true enlightenment. Thanks for commenting in such a positive way.

Michael Tor

Date: 11/1/2015 5:13:00 PM

Richard this is the write that anyone that has ever been in road rage should read. Because this is the exact transformation that takes place when someone cuts you off while your driving. It is a true description of the worst side of humans. I guess if you were saving someone from being bullied and you became enraged to protect it takes a positive note. This was cleverly written enjoyed reading and I always hope to be in control only because when we are in a state on anger we loose control and the anger controls us to act. Thanks for sharing my friend a winner in my book!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:03:00 PM

There are times when anger can be harnessed for noble purposes. That is an astute observation my friend.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/1/2015 12:23:00 PM

This impressive piece is one of your best Richard. The depth of your introspection is profound and soul searching. I must fave this outstanding poem! #7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:04:00 PM

Thanks for the visit and for faving this piece!;0)

Ralph Sergi

Date: 11/1/2015 10:02:00 AM

Hi Richard: I am impressed how you can use Anger in a positive sense. Great Write!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:05:00 PM

Thanks Ralph, so nice to have you visit.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/1/2015 8:03:00 AM

Great poem, Richard. I like how you capture these emotions. You are an amazing poet. You know it's true. Good luck in Cas' contest. Hugs....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 8:50:00 AM

Thanks Eileen.;0)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/1/2015 1:49:00 AM

In ancient Greece there was a time in the year during certain festivals of Dionysus that people allowed themselves to do things that during the whole year were controlling. No question this poem of yours is a profound analysis of our psycho synthesis and the battle that goes on between the opposites. Outstanding, dear Richard. A seven! Fifty-four? You are a child my friend, you are still a child, haha!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:26:00 AM

Hello Demetrios, Our Heavenly Father has given us all emotions for a reason. Anger is an emotion that has profoundly shaped the world we live in and is worthy of deep contemplation. When harnessed it can motivate us to do good and in fact move mountains. Thanks for your analysis of this piece and for looking below the surface.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/31/2015 11:31:00 AM

excellent pen richard i find my peace living amongst nature wishing you a lovely weekend dear friend

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:29:00 AM

Liam I think that is an excellent way to find your peace.

Kp Nunez

Date: 10/31/2015 10:45:00 AM

Whoahh...hard to imagine the ever affable gentleman letting go but this is a revelation! :-) I checked the contest requirements just now. This is great, and should do well, Rick! hugs!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/1/2015 7:35:00 AM

I hope you are right, I would be really "angry" if she didn't like it. Ha ha, sorry I couldn't resist. Growing up I seen what a destructive force anger is. Therefore my heart greatly prizes peace. As a result I see people differently even when they are angry with me. Thanks for visit and hug.:0)

Tim Smith

Date: 10/31/2015 8:41:00 AM

Very powerful piece Richard. Many hold their emotions in check.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/31/2015 9:21:00 AM

Thanks Tim.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/30/2015 6:12:00 PM

I am like you, Richard. Rarely do I blow up! I think I cannot do anger for this contest. By the way, I noticed Anger appeared in the third line from the bottom. In her rules I'm sure she says not to mention the word you are describing until you reach the final line. Hopefully you can adjust the poem and make that winners' list!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/30/2015 6:45:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, this is actually 8 lines split into 3 sections.

Mark Woods

Date: 10/29/2015 11:00:00 PM

I kind of relate to this, I'm the eternal bottler, the peaceful guy, and then when the beast comes out some poor bugger that's rattled the cage gets 3-4 years of anger unleashed in a torrent of words and they wilt at the shock!

Mark Woods
Date: 10/30/2015 12:41:00 PM

I still play cricket weekly, lol maybe thats what keep its to 3-4 years.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/30/2015 8:11:00 AM

Thanks Mark. For me I play sports and that allows me to keep my peace.