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Bed of Clouds

The Moon is just a silver scarf, As the Sun is just a Jewel Glowing above us, overhead Lighting the way for ev'ry Fool Rainbows envelop me, on this bed of clouds As the colours bring me back to life Let go of Hope in all my Sadness- My Soul of Gold, I twist the knife **COLORS CONTEST ENTRY

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Robin Davis

Date: 12/20/2013 5:07:00 PM

Chan my friend What a pretty and enchanting write. Full of imagery and description that pulls me into this story/journey Nice job Thanks for the awesome comment on my Stolen Hearts poem Hugs and Love Sweet Pea

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 12/21/2013 8:01:00 AM

Thanks as always, Sweet Pea :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/25/2013 3:13:00 PM

A deeply emotional poem, very beautiful! A very relaxing poem to read. Nicely done! Congratulations on your win in the "Colors" contest!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/26/2013 7:01:00 AM

Thanks as always, SP; very much appreciated <3

Karen Anglesey

Date: 10/17/2013 10:16:00 PM

Outstanding for the contest. Congrats!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/18/2013 10:17:00 AM

Thanks, hon <3 :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/16/2013 9:21:00 PM

very pretty...PD

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/17/2013 8:37:00 AM

Thanks, PD :)

Skat A

Date: 10/15/2013 10:12:00 PM

...............Congratulations! --LOVE-- ~SKAT~

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/16/2013 7:48:00 AM

Thanks for the honorable mention, Skat! :)

Jon A Cavanaugh

Date: 9/13/2013 7:13:00 PM

Enjoyed your poem. I also enjoyed your comment to Richard also. It illuminated the first four lines.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/14/2013 11:13:00 AM

It makes me happy that you enjoyed this piece, Jon; thank you for the read and review :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/22/2013 7:23:00 PM

You changed the rhyme scheme and the poem lost it's flow. Loved the first four lines.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/22/2013 9:11:00 PM

The first line was actually inspired by a tragic event. It was a story told to me, you know, one of those "friend of a friend" type stories about a guy on LSD who thought the moon was a silver scarf and swam into the ocean after it and drowned.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/22/2013 9:09:00 PM

You think? I've been re-reading it, and I think line 5 might be the only problematic part. Ok, I've been thinking about it a bit more, and I think, perhaps, the last 4 lines may be a bit forced.