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At the Pawn Shop

Ding Ding, I’m inside the local pawn shop I have a certain thing in mind to get This place is supposed to have things on top What I want I hope they have, I’ll be set I have a certain thing in mind to get It’s a grandiose feeling which I seek What I want I hope they have, I’ll be set Maybe it’s under this ring, I’ll just peek It’s a grandiose feeling which I seek Does the owner have emotions for sale Maybe it’s under this ring, I’ll just peek Love is what I want, put it in a pail Does the owner have emotions for sale This place is supposed to have things on top Love is what I want, put it in a pail Ding Ding, I’m inside the local pawn shop Contest: at the pawn shop Sponsor: Black Eyed Susan 6/15/2013

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Debra Mundine

Date: 6/20/2013 10:22:00 AM

I was very curious to see how a pawn shop theme can be transformed into a pantoum. And this composition is very impressive. It was a delightful read. Your work is marvelous.

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 6/16/2013 8:33:00 PM

A brilliant PANTOUM my friend!! faithful to the form, and a sure winner in the competition! Best wishes, Keith

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/16/2013 4:32:00 PM

a terrific poem ty for the big smiles Shadow x gl in contest

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 6/16/2013 4:25:00 PM

Hi Russell; This is a nice poem. I hope you got what you wanted. good luck in contest. God bless you always... Lucilla

Len Gasun

Date: 6/16/2013 3:54:00 AM

Another stunning write from you my dear friend, Russell. A sure winner for me! Thank you so much for sharing & good luck always! love lots, Leonora

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/16/2013 3:09:00 AM

Sparkling words littered with fresh imagery that is uniquely yours, russell... Enjoyed the tonal effect of this piece... again, you amaze; fantastic job!..:) huggs

Kash Poet

Date: 6/16/2013 2:03:00 AM

Very good Pantoum on the theme of the contest Russell! A sure winner here.

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/15/2013 1:35:00 PM

Russell, fantastic write! I've never tried a pantoum. You make it look so easy. I enjoyed reading your poem today! Love, Kim

Jack Horne

Date: 6/15/2013 11:58:00 AM

lovely thoughtful write here, my friend

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/15/2013 10:16:00 AM

I am not an expert in that form BUT I will learn for it is the norm! Russell a wonderful thought well-presented that left me with a smile for I found what I was looking for! Ding...Ding!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/15/2013 7:46:00 AM

Great Pantoum, I have just recently learned this form and appreciate the talent you have used in writing this one.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 6/15/2013 7:39:00 AM

WOW!! An original topic and well written "Pantoum"-- just been educated as to how to write one through this :)