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As She Told Me About Her Flute

His flute would make flowers bloom Bees would hum their song in the flute To me there was music in his wavy breath That aroused buds in my window garden I would feel sparks in the flow of my blood Life without him and his flute would be futile Because he brought out music from his air He was the most truthful this I believed The spring of my smile overwhelmed the flute We made maddening love and got married The nectar from his breath on my lips Made me shudder into a blue emptiness I didn't realise this summer would be brief too I would be destroyed by the underlying violence My flowers of love turned wounds of abuse The music worsened into verbal assaults Passion of the flute shifted to my sister One after another broken nests followed I rue the moment I thought I had struck gold Little did I realise it was a fool's gold ___________________________________________________ 19/11/2016

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Date: 12/2/2016 5:19:00 AM
OH....GREAT ....RICH WITH PAIN ......GREAT JOB AGAIN SIR.....
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Probir Gupta
Date: 12/2/2016 8:35:00 PM
Thank you ... No need to say sir ... We are fellow poets ...
Date: 11/29/2016 5:59:00 AM
Such a beautiful poem, Probir. I truly placed this poem above my poem in the "Fool's Gold" contest. This poem is a poet's poem. Love and joy to my poetic friend.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/29/2016 11:11:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/28/2016 7:39:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Probir.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/28/2016 9:10:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/27/2016 8:15:00 AM
Hi Probir, Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: ') Alexis
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/28/2016 9:10:00 AM
Thank you, Alexis ...
Date: 11/27/2016 2:17:00 AM
Great poem, sir! I was sure it was going in one direction, then it shifted. Congrats!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/27/2016 5:05:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/26/2016 8:26:00 PM
Unique write. Congratulations on your win.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/27/2016 5:06:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/26/2016 10:09:00 AM
Congratulations Probir...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/26/2016 7:55:00 PM
Thank you, Charlie ...
Date: 11/26/2016 9:44:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win, Hugs Eve
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/26/2016 7:55:00 PM
Thank you, Eve ...
Date: 11/19/2016 3:36:00 PM
A bittersweet, tragically beautiful poem, Probir. I got me some tough competition for the Fool's Gold contest. This is a really wonderful poem, my poetic friend. The breadth of humanity is displayed well w/your pen. Love and many blessings.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/19/2016 7:37:00 PM
Thank you, Freddie ...
Date: 11/19/2016 2:11:00 PM
Oh this is so good, Probir, the change of moods from gay to heartfelt ... good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/19/2016 7:38:00 PM
Thank you, Eve ... You always encourage me ...
Date: 11/19/2016 1:26:00 PM
This is a slice of life as it can happen. The way it progresses is so very well orchestrated. I didn't expect this sort of ending. You reeled me in and then hit me over the head with this hammer. It least WE know how to behave, or should I speak only for myself?
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/19/2016 7:44:00 PM
Thank you for your kind visit and the ponderable comment ... The line - limit set in contests poses a little problem ... may be the transition was a little sudden ... thank you so much ...
Date: 11/19/2016 1:12:00 AM
As always your writing goes deep into the soul exploring the unending possibilities of life! A profound writing dear , Probir!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/19/2016 11:19:00 AM
Thank you so much ... sorry for the disturbing 19/11 ...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/19/2016 11:18:00 AM
19/11/2016

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