Aphrodite

Gorgeous, eternally young Alluring she emerges Rising from the foaming waves In dazzling beauty. The forged magical girdle She wears ‘round her naked waist Attracts with enticing charms The power of love. ----------------------------------------- Contest: Dodoitsu Sponsor: Dr. Ram Mehta

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Julia Ward

Date: 3/10/2015 3:00:00 AM

"Eternally young" - a quality that "mutton dressed as lamb" women don't cut. Well done for your description of Aphrodite. Hugs, Julia

Paul Callus
Date: 3/10/2015 11:16:00 AM

Nothing wrong with wishing to be eternally young...but we know that it's not possible! But looking good is possible and satisfying....not to the extent of resorting to all kinds of beauty ops:) Hugs // paul

Carol Mays

Date: 2/19/2015 8:09:00 PM

Paul--I was inspired by these beautiful images. Thank you. Carol

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2015 10:51:00 AM

I have to thank you, Carol! Knowing that you have been touched by these few lines is what matters most! // paul

Bonnie Hollywood-Cutts

Date: 2/17/2015 4:05:00 PM

very vivid imagery to this one. It kept my attention as I could imagine see her ccome on short using her charms to woo the helpless man back to her

Paul Callus
Date: 2/17/2015 4:27:00 PM

Many thanks Bonnie for stopping by with lovely comments. Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/15/2015 5:34:00 PM

forgot to say, sorry about your dog. that is the same age that my Callie cat got to before we had her put to sleep, age 17.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/16/2015 3:07:00 PM

To be exact, Snowball was a male cat, as white as snow; in the end it would have been cruel to prolong his then miserable life. My ban on animals has now gone haywire...all of a sudden my son started bringing in birds! We reached a compromise...he puts them in the shed!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/12/2015 7:38:00 AM

You have succeeded sculpturing her body having your pen a chisel, dear Paul! A masterpiece accomplished, a seven for that! In case any of your readers doesn't know! Aphrodite is a compound word from Afros=foam and the verb diome=rise or come out of the foam of the sea.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 4:15:00 PM

Hi Demi! Finally managing to answer to some comments; it's been frustrating with no soup mail coming through. As you can see, I used foam and rising since they're both derived from the goddess's name. Greek mythology has long been in my heart. All the best. // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 2/11/2015 10:38:00 PM

A beautiful, sensual entry for the doditsu contest, Paul! It reminds of a poem a boy wrote for me when I was 16. He compared me to Aphrodite...LOL. See, it still gives me a good laugh! Hugs, Rhonda

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 4:03:00 PM

At least this served to take you back to teenage years, Rhonda! Bet you have preserved that poem:) I am sure he appreciated beauty! Thanks for stopping by...and Happy Valentine's Day! hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/11/2015 7:20:00 PM

This has winner written all over it!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 4:00:00 PM

thank you Richard; all the best! // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/11/2015 7:37:00 AM

- A beautiful painting, Greek mythology Paul - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:59:00 PM

Greek mythology is a favourite of mine, Anne Lise. I see that you like:) Have a happy Valentine's Day! hugs /x/ paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/11/2015 7:36:00 AM

Oh great job with this Paul! :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:57:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed...thank you Casarah! // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 2/11/2015 3:56:00 AM

Enticing indeed. Love Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:28:00 PM

Thank you Rajat; have a nice weekend my friend. // paul

David Meade

Date: 2/10/2015 10:41:00 PM

Enticing charms indeed -- I don't think we are talking chocolate brownies here. Nicely done dear friend. 7

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:33:00 PM

Somewhat different from chocolate brownies, David! A goddess of beauty and love she is, and her charms are felt by many. Glad you read and enjoyed my friend. // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/10/2015 10:25:00 PM

Love this!!! WOW! You really seem to love Aphrodite! Not the first time you've mentioned her. Lovely piece. Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:27:00 PM

Yes, Eileen; I've mentioned her before; as goddess who radiates love to others she has to be given due attention. She might be 'eternal', but it's up to us to keep her flame burning. hugs and a happy Valentine's day. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/10/2015 9:25:00 PM

Aphrodite's beauty and love goes together,and you made this vision come to life Paul..I can picture this greek goddess..Awesome.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:15:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Charm. Hope you have a lovely Valentine's Day...who knows, maybe roses this year, for a change!! // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/10/2015 7:36:00 PM

So nice to read your verse this evening. There is nothing like love is there? Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:04:00 PM

Let's say that love inspires many of our writes:) glad you enjoyed. All the best. // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/10/2015 6:51:00 PM

ooh, very smoothly done, paul! nice one!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 3:02:00 PM

Thank you Ilene...love your smooth comment! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 2/10/2015 6:36:00 PM

Very nice pen Paul! Your dodoitsu suit about Aphrodite is very lovely, my dear friend. Well done! A 7 from me! GL in the contest! In his light! God bless! :) Love n' hugs! xxx D.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 2:53:00 PM

Thank you Dorian, especially for rating it high. Pleased that you enjoyed. Thank you also for your continued support. All the best. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/10/2015 6:09:00 PM

You portrayed her very well, Paul. Love that you chose the Goddess of Love!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 2:32:00 PM

Hi Andrea! am playing around trying to answer comments by trial and error; not getting any soup mail has disrupted me no end! Aphrodite is a favourite of mine (....and prefer the name to the Roman Venus!) Happy Valentine's Day:) // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 2/10/2015 6:05:00 PM

You have portrayed this Greek godess to perfection - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx

Jan Allison
Date: 2/11/2015 3:11:00 PM

I have added a picture now Paul - lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/11/2015 2:50:00 PM

Thank you, Jan! Have just read your monoku:) hugs // paul