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Along the Shady Paths of Vivid Green

And the cemetery was fresh and vivid green when we took our bikes down the paths of it - past stones and trees and mausoleums and grass as far as we could see, carefree on that muggy summer afternoon, perspiration glistening on our arms and on our faces as we sought to stay on the shady side of each well-traveled lane. Instinctively we followed Dale, our older red-haired fun-loving brother, turning here and there; it didn’t matter. We had no destination, no gravesites of friends or relatives to visit. Sometimes we would spot an interesting tombstone, jump off our bikes and take a closer look at it. We were just kids, out of school for summer with no real obligations. Our lives were a clean slate, not like the worn and broken headstones we spotted sometimes on the cemetery’s edge, the older area’s grave stones whose names were hard to read and dates went as far back as the 1800’s. Those were emblems of an ancient past for us. It was 1965! We were the modern generation and the future loomed as large for us as those many squared city blocks the cemetery measured. Flash forward two decades to 1984. I was married with two small kids and back in my hometown; things around me seeming so much smaller, and the future loomed not quite so large ahead of me this time. Most of my sisters were married but leading separate lives in different states. We all had pressing obligations, so our reunion could not be a long one. No longer were my sisters and I carefree, and we were not riding bikes. We rode in cars that followed one another in a line. And the cemetery was cold and dismal grey on that December day as we gathered around the unearthed sod, staring, unbelieving, into the giant hole that was to be the final resting place for the brother whom we’d once followed so gleefully along the shady paths of vivid green. Written May 19, 2016 for the "And The Cemetery Was" Poetry Contest Contest of Broken Wings

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Date: 6/4/2016 12:25:00 PM
My god this is chilling Andrea.painfully unpredictable. I was reading gracefully and then the sudden Muhammad Ali punch that threw me off the chair.full accolades.
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Date: 6/2/2016 5:46:00 PM
So beautiful and so heartfelt congratulations on your win!
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Date: 6/2/2016 4:27:00 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your first place in my contest, oh my what an emotional write, that ending was staggering, so well done, Constance
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Date: 6/2/2016 10:01:00 AM
A beautiful write Andrea, Congrats :)
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Date: 6/2/2016 8:25:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea. A winning write from beginning to end. ...Fran
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:47:00 AM
A really touching write:) Congratulations on your fine win, Andrea:)
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Date: 6/1/2016 11:52:00 PM
Dear Andrea, a very beautiful poem, to say the least. Poignant because of the personal tragedy. There is plenty of contrast in your poem - days of fun, days of youth, the verdant cemetery a place of so much fun. And then age catches up, there is sombreness, bikes replaced by cars, progression of time, and the cemetery again. But OK, it was December and a day of mourning - spring will be around - there will be more bikes, and the cemetery will be fresh and vivid green again!
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Karam Misra
Date: 6/1/2016 11:54:00 PM
(Couldn't complete because of character restrictions). Congratulations on your perfect placement right at the top! ~karam~
Date: 6/1/2016 9:53:00 PM
Congratulations on your win ....such an emotional write with an unexpected ending.
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Date: 6/1/2016 8:44:00 PM
Congratulations on your poignant write and first place win!
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Date: 6/1/2016 8:40:00 PM
So sad, Andrea, how your excellent narrative emotionally brings the happy and tragic together separated by two decades. Sorry for your loss...Congrats on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 6/1/2016 8:21:00 PM
A most deserving win Andrea, congratulations...
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Date: 6/1/2016 6:40:00 PM
A touching write Andrea....Congrats on your win
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Date: 6/1/2016 6:32:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this lovely but sad tale. Love, joyce
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Date: 5/28/2016 10:38:00 PM
Hello Andrea ... so touching - and brilliant - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 5/27/2016 11:32:00 AM
Wow, so poignant, touching, and gosh ... MOVING! I think this is the best cemetery poem that I've read because of how real it felt ... the darkness was saved for last, making it stand out more. Exceptional narrative, Andrea. A FAVE!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/27/2016 8:19:00 PM
thanks so much , Timothy. I felt so happy to be inspired this way by BW's theme.
Date: 5/26/2016 1:31:00 PM
A heart touching poem and after reading a nice heart will feel very sad surely and eyes will be soaked up with tears. Well done my lovely friend. God has blessed you a golden passionate heart. Good luck with a great 7. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/23/2016 5:19:00 PM
Made me cry! Last verse, I could picture in my mind, great write!
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Date: 5/23/2016 8:11:00 AM
Well, I'm crying now. Everything so elegantly written. Love the ending, along the shady paths of vivid green.
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Date: 5/22/2016 5:51:00 AM
Simply beautiful composition. Feels like the poet is reciting while the readers listen. A pleasure. ...Fran
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Date: 5/22/2016 4:52:00 AM
i like this poetic narrative from you, andrea, really good entry for the contest, i think constance will love it, so heart wrenching there at the end (hugs)...also thanks for my placement in your recent contest, these summer shorties have been fun and are good writing exercises - though i have to agree to disagree about the use of punctuation and capitalization in tanka! lol renowned poet philip gross wrote a lovely one called 'dragonfly tanka' and he capitalizes and punctuates it
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Date: 5/22/2016 4:50:00 AM
When someone is taken from us in their prime of youth unexpectedly the pain is that much more difficult. You never really get over it. A poignant piece that should do well Andrea. Blessings, Connie
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Date: 5/22/2016 4:05:00 AM
A touching narrative that puts things in perspective and make us think a little bit more of our mortality! What we borrow we have to return so as to borrow again! Wonderful writing dear Andrea! Liked it!
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Date: 5/21/2016 7:15:00 PM
Sad memory recounted in these lines for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Yes, those angel crepey wings aren't pretty..Sara
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Date: 5/21/2016 3:56:00 PM
Oh i love this Andrea, takes me back to my grave digging days, especially the december one's.. along the shady paths.. truly remarkable poetry
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Date: 5/21/2016 2:42:00 PM
poignant work of art, andie... we sometimes meet death in its most unusual time.. blessings to dale; am still mourning.. really fine piece!..huggs
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