Get Your Premium Membership

Alone

Each day as she gazes early morning sky with sips of coffee and memories gone by, horizon blushes like staring in lover's eyes, just as she remembers when he sat next to her in embrace of winds and rising orange glow as birds flew over the shining meadows. How hard it must be to conjure up such emotions when today is not much different than yesterday and sun kisses horizon just the same every day. Yet, she aspires to behold sentiments long gone hoping for renewal of evocative romance sitting on her deck reminiscing ardent past. One day she ventures out in drenching rain as darker horizon manifests her stark loneliness and sun hides in clouds, devoid of its charm. In pouring rain she stays sodden in reflection when tears join discourse of bleak emptiness as remnants of fervor and passion wash away. First Place October 25, 2017 Standard Contest No. 45 Sponsor: Brian Strands

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

12
Date: 3/29/2018 3:32:00 AM
Wow Vijay congratulations on your well deserved placing in the contest! Really enjoyed this piece and you really don't disappoint the reader, I found the ending very liberating :)
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/29/2018 1:10:00 PM
Many thanks Kyle.
Date: 11/8/2017 2:10:00 AM
Strong emotions in your poem Vijay.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/8/2017 5:47:00 AM
Thank you James!
Date: 10/30/2017 12:10:00 PM
Heartbreaking - such simplicity of loneliness so well expressed. Beautiful. Well deserved win.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/30/2017 12:18:00 PM
Thank you Line--appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/30/2017 8:35:00 AM
My poor words won't even come near to describe the perfection and beauty of your poem. Congratulations. So well done!
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/30/2017 11:20:00 AM
Thank you Frances!
Date: 10/30/2017 8:14:00 AM
Vijay, a wonderful write.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/30/2017 11:20:00 AM
Many thanks James!
Date: 10/29/2017 7:02:00 PM
Such a powerful, well-written poem, Vijay, with 'aloneness' so vividly presented. Although Free Verse, I felt such poetic rhythm in your words. Congrats on your fine 1st place win. Sandra
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2017 9:32:00 PM
Thank you Sandra!
Date: 10/29/2017 2:44:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Vijay!
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2017 4:17:00 PM
Thank you Dale!
Date: 10/29/2017 11:12:00 AM
Great poem Vijay, congrats :)
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2017 4:17:00 PM
Thanks Gary!
Date: 10/28/2017 12:19:00 AM
"she aspires to behold sentiments long gone, hoping for renewal of evocative romance" ~ you have a beautiful way of expressing emotions, Vigay. Absolutely gorgeous.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/28/2017 7:07:00 AM
Thank you Becca!
Date: 10/27/2017 8:42:00 PM
Such a powerful piece. Very well written Vijay.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2017 9:22:00 PM
Thank you James!
Date: 10/27/2017 11:00:00 AM
Lovely poem with appealing bittersweet descriptions and tone, Vijay! Janice
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2017 11:51:00 AM
Thank you Janice!
Date: 10/27/2017 11:00:00 AM
Lovely poem with appealing bittersweet descriptions and tone, Vijay! Janice
Login to Reply
Date: 10/27/2017 9:09:00 AM
Such a powerful piece.The flow of words comes together like an orchestra. "One day she ventures out....."-There is power in this venture that we all must dare. Blessings my friend.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2017 9:17:00 AM
Appreciate your comments, curtis--many thanks!
Date: 10/27/2017 8:35:00 AM
You have expressed this loss and sadness so well with superb description. Great lines in this poem. Well done Vijay :)
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2017 9:16:00 AM
A joy to see you back in this space--many thanks Heidi! Hope your project is going well--best wishes for a successful outcome!!
Date: 10/27/2017 7:30:00 AM
The bitter the disappointment, the sweeter the love to come! Superbly written my friend, Vijay!
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2017 9:14:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words Demetrios!
Date: 10/26/2017 9:06:00 PM
A very sad poem w/such deep melancholy romanticism exuding from your inked pores, Vijay. This is so elegantly written ... when tears join discourse of bleak emptiness as remnants of fervor and passion wash away. Listening to Al Jarreau's "All" while reading this gorgeous poem was exquisitely divine. You are so talented, it's really beautiful to read. Splendid poem. Solar powered poetry, my friend. Love and smiles always.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/27/2017 7:13:00 AM
Thank you Freddie!
Date: 10/26/2017 1:42:00 PM
- A lovely poem with sad feelings, Vijay - Greatly described with your words - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 1:44:00 PM
Many thanks, Anne-Lise--appreciate your comments!
Date: 10/26/2017 8:56:00 AM
A sad write my friend..
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:23:00 AM
True--Thank you Silent One!
Date: 10/26/2017 8:31:00 AM
Your imagery is exquisite and you have drenched us in your emotion.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:22:00 AM
Thank you Richard--appreciate your visit!
Date: 10/26/2017 8:13:00 AM
Such things make us cry or smile...Live or die...In the end, it's the wonder of life
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:21:00 AM
You are right--thanks Arturo!
Date: 10/26/2017 6:20:00 AM
You have a great poetic flair Vijay. Such imagery in your words. you set a melancholy scene well...Maria
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:21:00 AM
Thank you Maria!
Date: 10/26/2017 2:48:00 AM
Excellent. Great imagery write. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:20:00 AM
Many thanks Ravi!
Date: 10/25/2017 10:07:00 PM
Those clouds have a way of depressing the soul! Great contrast!
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:19:00 AM
Thank you Kim--you are right, a contrast was intended!
Date: 10/25/2017 7:23:00 PM
Beautiful pen Vijay, not without melancholy. xomo :)
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:18:00 AM
Thank you Maureen!
Date: 10/25/2017 7:16:00 PM
You captured very well that feeling of "aloneness" in this melancholy poem, Vijay.
Login to Reply
Pandit Avatar
Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/26/2017 10:18:00 AM
Thank you Andrea!
12

Book: Reflection on the Important Things