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Acid Tears

Under the passing smile he nourished his monstrous collusion Plunder the face, while my shattered mirror fallen in confusion Hunter shammed in the veil of love, pursued the pleasure of delusion Thunder struck into a litter pile, driven me to a life in seclusion Wonder how the hostile acid, deformed my face into exclusion Sunder my life into an isle, the immense vacuity of illusion. Third Place in Triple Rhyme Poetry Contest sponsored by Beth Evans

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Date: 7/16/2020 9:00:00 AM
Your muse is really touching Jenish. This is such a powerful tale of sadness and strength. Loved the reference from the real incident portrayed in the movie. Numerous barbaric stories have been narrated in a nutshell. Congratulations on your win my friend. Blessings :)
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/18/2020 11:35:00 PM
Thank you Aditi for your support.. Yes, it is a sad story.. Unfortunately the story is still continuing in different places..
Date: 7/13/2020 7:35:00 PM
A very well written yet sad piece Jenish. Wonderful wording throughout and your end rhymes were especially good.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/13/2020 11:48:00 PM
Thank you James for your delightful word.. Have a great day..
Date: 7/12/2020 3:34:00 AM
Visually illuminating, Jenish, your awe-inspiring vocabulary was expressly well-done and my compliments in your placement, my friend -- Aloha from Hawaii~@William
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/12/2020 4:30:00 AM
Thank you William for your support.. Have a great day..
Date: 7/11/2020 5:10:00 PM
Very moving and powerful. I imagine not easy to write (in several respects). Best to you, Jenish.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/11/2020 11:35:00 PM
Thank you Eric for your kind support.. Have a great day..
Date: 7/11/2020 1:56:00 PM
Congrats for your win, Jenish. such a sad story in this one.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/11/2020 11:34:00 PM
Thank you Andrea..
Date: 7/11/2020 8:57:00 AM
CONGRATS on your win with this well-written poem, Jenish! Sad, shocking story! Janice
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/11/2020 11:33:00 PM
Thank you Janice.. Yes, it is sad to know that it is still happening around..
Date: 7/11/2020 8:34:00 AM
I'm pleased to see this one being honored in the contest. Congratulations, Jenish.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/11/2020 11:32:00 PM
Thank you Jenna.. I'm delighted reading your words...
Date: 6/30/2020 2:47:00 PM
That's just heartbreaking. I would hope it made her more beautiful inside.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/30/2020 11:47:00 PM
Yes, it is heartbreaking.. Thank you Jenna.. Have a great day..
Date: 6/30/2020 7:03:00 AM
A tragic event of the kind took place in Greece last month when a thirty-five-year-old woman attacked viciously with acid a thirty-four- year- old young lady. Your poetic ardor has managed to obliterate the ugliness of the act with poetic beauty dearest, Jenish! Hugs xxx
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/30/2020 11:46:00 PM
Yes.. Demetrios.. It is happening in different places.. These types of attacks are giving the victims pain for a life long.. How sadist some minds are!!
Date: 6/30/2020 3:39:00 AM
Nicely done my friend...great entry Jenish...best of luck...^WW^ :o)
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/30/2020 11:41:00 PM
Thank you Winged Warrior..
Date: 6/30/2020 12:52:00 AM
Very deep poem Jenish. The world has become a very frightening place, too much unnecessary hatred ... Take care...Shirley
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/30/2020 11:40:00 PM
Thank you Shirley.. A great share of acid cases are 'love' related.. Interesting.. rejection of love leading to hatred..
Date: 6/29/2020 7:18:00 PM
'Acid tears' - gruesome stuff. Gotta agree with Tom below. Stay sane, Gershon
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/29/2020 11:38:00 PM
Yes.. Gruesome..In this world when good increases, evil will also rise..
Date: 6/29/2020 6:46:00 AM
Well written Jenish, those evil scum who carry out those wicked attacks should be hung. They might as well have killed the victim because they have ruined their lives Tom
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/29/2020 11:37:00 PM
You said it Tom.. I support you fully.. Those devils should be treated as murderers..
Date: 6/29/2020 6:44:00 AM
Those two faces tell the horror story--you gave them a voice, Jenish..all the best.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/29/2020 11:36:00 PM
Thank you Vijay for the kind support..

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