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A WINTER SECRET: Confessions of a woman blessed with true love -for Mix It Up contest

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A WINTER SECRET: Confessions of a woman blessed with true love -for Mix It Up contest

A WINTER  SECRET: Confessions of a woman blessed with true love .(for Mix It Up  contest)
                                         
                                          frost shields the window
                                       deepening the sleep within --
                                                  soft snores

  The winter chill cut deep. An eerie frosty silence loomed all over white stillness. Glad, my heart was the only thing that was on fire .But it had been so since the advent of that winter. True, funny too, I had met him only a couple of times and spoke to him just once. Then, our eyes had held each other’s in rapturous oblivion of the commotion around us .My heart began its tremble at the very thought .I was deeply intrigued at the throb, but I let it stay. It was a sweet tantalizing torment  .I disguised all that girly cravings in a sophisticated smile and appeared composed. All the while the feminine faculty raced frantically within the psyche to sort an answer for my mammoth attraction and hazed feelings… can it be love? I pulled on my mauve suede jacket and ankle high boots , let myself out for a tranquil pace of contemplation free from the ribbing of reality. Shamelessly banal, I began. Was it his sleek movements, or his deep tawny eyes, or his frank demeanor, or his graceful hands? I was panting. I stopped there .I entered a café for a warm recluse. As I waited for my cafe -latte at a corner table, I was drawn into a penetrating set of eyes, caught quite off-guard. He approached me and with that throaty chuckle and sincere plea, he asked me out for a walk. [Crazy? I thought to myself when I saw the  soft drizzle outside].

    We walked along the slippery side lanes .Heavy lidded and glazed, my eyes picked beauty in abundance .Everywhere .My hands deep in pockets and chin held up, I gave a good pretense. To  look calm. But my nerves were crackling in excitement. Winter winds were harsh .He took me home. Astonishing ,I found myself talking to him with an astounding ease.Waves of warm love exuded and all I longed for was to be in his arms. But I sat there with  a put on stoic diplomacy. Tapestries were classy and beautiful, I noted. And that was all .Vision blurred and wild honey flowed... I felt a warm homecoming in his arms, as natural as a flower blooming under tender moonlight....

                                                  
                                                   the moon shines
                                                 on two sated lovers -- 
                                                    cell -phone rings
                                                 



Mehnaz,
30.01.2013.

For Debbie 's Mix It Up Contest.

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  1. Date: 2/12/2013 6:47:00 AM
    Congrats on your great win..Sara

  1. Date: 2/7/2013 10:47:00 AM
    Mehnaz, Congratulations on your winning "mixed up poem." Have yourself a nice day~ :-) xox~PD

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 2:35:00 PM
    I just loved this one, and I am glad you got a win with it. I can see you are getting congrats here, so congrats from ME too.

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 10:02:00 AM
    So I sit here and sighhhh...still awaiting arms to hold me and send my insecurities floating away on the wind. This spoke to me deeply...at my inner hopes and dreams. So romantic !! Congrats on a well earned win !!

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 3:50:00 AM
    Big congrats once more Mehnaz xx

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 2:54:00 AM
    Absolute pleasure reading this passionately romantic work of yours Mehnaz! hmm..you are one bundle of talent. Congrats! and many thanks for your notes at my pages.

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 8:32:00 PM
    Great read Mehnaz well done ....Seren

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/6/2013 12:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thank you ,Seren...
  1. Date: 2/5/2013 6:40:00 PM
    Yup the gal worked and worked hard and produced a gem! Congrad's sweetie do one for Spring now? Light & Love

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/6/2013 12:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    yippee...thanks Debbie...big hugs..
  1. Date: 2/5/2013 4:33:00 PM
    I knew this would be a winner, great job!

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/6/2013 12:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    am honored, Richard...thanks..
  1. Date: 2/5/2013 3:23:00 PM
    Might I suggest bring the WHOLE write into the present tense? It will make it even more immediate and involving for the reader and mesh better with the haiku concept. [even though the haiku MOMENT is in the past we reveal it as if we were there in the MOMENT] You have worked so hard and we are having fun and this will make what's already good even better. Light & Love

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/6/2013 12:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I enjoyed working on your contest...thank you so much..
  1. Date: 2/4/2013 1:06:00 PM
    Very good prose, the contest is almost full only 1 more to go..you need to work on the haiku here both of them. google Graceguts haiku checklist basically now both verse have 3 parts instead of 2 since 2 of the lines must be gramatically joined and they are not here..I do so hope you get time to work on them. soup mail me when you have re done the haiku and I'll check..perhaps look at what others have done? Light & Love

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/6/2013 12:56:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    k, Debbie...thanks for the big help....
  1. Date: 2/1/2013 7:22:00 PM
    This is very moving, a wonderful depiction of love blooming. I enjoyed your poem very much. Nice to see love from a woman's perspective.

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/1/2013 7:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks Richard...
  1. Date: 1/31/2013 9:54:00 AM
    your poetry is like the blooming flower under the moonlight, a wonder in its entirety,, your story flows just like your amazing pen..

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/1/2013 7:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thank you harry
  1. Date: 1/30/2013 11:09:00 PM
    wow, I really enjoyed this one. what a great way to do that contest!

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/1/2013 7:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    glad you liked it Andrea...
  1. Date: 1/30/2013 12:03:00 PM
    Winner for sure..Great way to go with the idea for the contest..Reads like love at first meeting..Thanks for stopping by.Sara

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/1/2013 7:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks a lot Sara for the kind words...
  1. Date: 1/30/2013 6:27:00 AM
    an illustrious write Mehnaz....loved it......winning wishes....

    Veetil Avatar Mehnaz Veetil
    Date: 2/1/2013 7:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks Joseph...