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A Trio of Whiteness

The One Lilies were lifting white faces up to the sun. I gazed up at him as he leaned down to kiss me. . . He - a white knight - was the one. White - A Love Story White was the blanket on which we lay under the clouds of that warm April day. White were the lilies perfuming the air. How happy was I - my white knight was there. Summer arrived; on sand gleaming white we lay in the sun and kissed until night. White was the gold of the ring that I wore and bright like the love of the one I adored. White was the dress I carefully chose for our special day, and white was the rose he placed on our bed, its sheets - white as milk - were smooth like his skin and woven in silk. White was the snow our first Christmas day before all the whiteness got swept away! In the dark casket, his face seemed so pale as I bent to kiss my true love farewell. At My White Knight’s Grave into stone cold ground his black casket was lowered. . . snow fell all around tanka/rhyme/senryu Inspired by Anthony Slauson's Whiteness Poetry Contest

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Date: 12/3/2012 1:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Anthony's "Whiteness" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/1/2012 5:54:00 PM
Not only one, but three beautiful examples of the whiteness of poetic genius!! Great job..., Andrea!
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Date: 12/1/2012 3:29:00 PM
Creative use of format in this lovely but hauntingly sad poem, Andrea! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 11/30/2012 12:15:00 PM
You have a way with words, lady! Your descriptions are reminiscent of some of my favourite Tennyson poems (i.e. The Lady of Shalott). Big congratulations on your well-deserved win!!
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Date: 11/30/2012 11:56:00 AM
Andrea, congratulations with your awesome win,, always~pd
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Date: 11/30/2012 11:54:00 AM
congrats on a great win Andrea
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Date: 10/18/2012 6:52:00 PM
this series was very well written, a beautiful love story that ended leaving me with the chill of winter and death's hands...well done!
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Date: 10/13/2012 12:36:00 PM
I must say this is an awesome poem and I am such a romantic with this white knight story. Wow outstanding. love phyl
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Date: 10/11/2012 9:41:00 AM
wow! drove me speechless.... a definite winner!
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Date: 10/10/2012 4:29:00 PM
my, andie...a series of rose poems by you has given me a deeper appreciation of white's various images... just super!..:) huggs
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Date: 10/10/2012 3:49:00 PM
Wow, quite the ride. Beautifully done Andrea.
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Date: 10/10/2012 9:44:00 AM
beautiful but sad write, my friend.
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Date: 10/9/2012 11:18:00 PM
Written very well. Looks like a tough competitor for Anthony's contest.
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Date: 10/9/2012 12:56:00 PM
This would make a wonderful song, Andrea. I got all goose-bumply all the way through. GREAT! Love, daver
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Date: 10/9/2012 9:50:00 AM
uniquely different and intriguing Andrea as u take the reader through the facets of whiteness so wonderfully my friend .. sure to be at the top of the winners list .. luv the white-a love story best luv ..my romantic heart chimes ..
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Date: 10/9/2012 1:19:00 AM
Super wow!!! So speechless on this outstanding write of yours my dear Andrea! A very delightful one to read! GRAND WINNER FOR ME!! Good luck and best wishes always! love and hugs:) Leonora
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Date: 10/8/2012 10:33:00 PM
wow, Andrea,, after reading your Tanka, and story,,, i'm not to sure i want to use mine for any contest... besides... Susan, only asked for one... you did lots of good and crazy things up there... wow.... Thank you for this awesome read... wish I could figure it out????????. Goodnight :-)~ PD
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Date: 10/8/2012 9:35:00 PM
Superb! Excellent!! these words describe your poem friend Andrea...Good luck!! It's a sure winner to me..hugs (^_^)
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Date: 10/8/2012 8:28:00 PM
Glad you were inspired to write this wonderful piece or we all would have been deprived. Enjoyed, Loved the little twist at the end as the knight is laid to rest in a black coffin and snow swirling aroound.
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Date: 10/8/2012 11:26:00 AM
Wow what a powerful trilogy my friend, I loved the insightfulness you exuded between the three! You have used your infinite wisdom of the forms to create a masterpiece here! Or should I say three of them! What a fantastic powerful piece Andrea, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/8/2012 9:52:00 AM
wow! this is masterfully done. all three meld together so effortlessly and tell a beautiful, sad story. bravo!
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Date: 10/8/2012 9:51:00 AM
wow Andrea, yes i agree with Joann these are bound together, wonderful poetry as only you can write,,
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Date: 10/8/2012 8:46:00 AM
These three poems read almost as one, yet each stands on its own merit as well. magnificently written. I know you will do well in the contest, but beyond that, this is why I love your work.
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Date: 10/8/2012 6:25:00 AM
great trio Andrea....winning wishes....hugs...Joseph
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Date: 10/8/2012 6:01:00 AM
So romantic with the so sad twist at the end..I felt roller coast ride emotions..Great attention getter..Winner in my book..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..I was not happy with mine but I went ahead and posted and entered it..It still needs some work..Sara
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