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dreamt to relieve myself of fearful thoughts, patriotic plots. dressed to kill in Washington skirt, no pants of a farmer wielding a British brown bess blessed with happiness before the frightening knock at the door exploded out of shock towards the door...towards the door while family holds their revolutionary breaths the bouquet of children unaware of dangerous situation a shot in the dark a shot heard round the world that never stops 7/16/2020

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Date: 7/17/2020 2:57:00 AM
Your poetry always delights me; I can see you in the uniform, holding the musket, at the ready, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/17/2020 4:49:00 AM
:) You always make me smile!
Date: 7/16/2020 10:12:00 PM
Remarkable, Kim! You gave vitality and depth to an event in history that has become little more than a cliche over time. Thank you for the historical revival. FAVE! We need this kind of history much more than what's being created today by the 'Monument-Topplers.' Thanks! Light and Love, Gershon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/17/2020 4:50:00 AM
Thanks, my friend! Shall we call them MTs? ;)
Date: 7/16/2020 12:03:00 PM
Although I do not know the particular story of your revolution, I liked enjoyed the poem's spirit and rhymes dearest, Kim! Hugs xxx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2020 5:33:00 PM
This is really a mix of a nightmare I had and the revolution. Part of our history has “the shot heard around the world.”
Date: 7/16/2020 10:40:00 AM
Kim, I really like your take on the 'shot heard around the world' tale. Enjoyed the internal rhymes of Bess/blessed/happiness and knock/shock and the feeling of tension that grows as you describe the children 'holding their revolutionary breaths'. A pleasure to read ~ John
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2020 11:41:00 AM
Thank you, John! I appreciate you!

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