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In a blink of an eye my stoic attitude had fled deep dark daze I'm overwhelmed with thrills and terror I take calm, breaths to contain myself panic is a mirror image of distress from limitless duplicated ill intents as walls rose so did mystery and fearful sound Inside, fortifications are bolstered my head is full of guilt, concern, and sadness wriggling brain distributes tendrils like suffocating vines throat was wrapped around them but don’t fall, as well frightened when you swathe mirror with your strife, pull the string continuously, there's no end there are no end or last word there is no rest, sleep, or death claw on my face and nails at my neck my fingertips irritate my eyes staggered up to a mirror, ripping its glass and a vision gazes right back at you, revealing brawniness to persist in like a prison of endless march and bloody drag never-ending loop, breaking day unending hunger, clicking drumbeats, eternity fall on green grass in the heavenly sea white stars shine during the day magpies humming mating Written: October 10, 2022 A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Date: 10/12/2022 10:16:00 AM
Back with congratulations on your lightning strike design winning work. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 10/12/2022 9:42:00 AM
Lasaad, what a personal journey you have taken us on with this poem of transparency in vibrant images and poetic pictures. The formatting reinforces the ups and downs of a personal pilgrimage! Congratulations on your win my friend. Blessings for your journey!
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Date: 10/10/2022 3:43:00 PM
wow, you wrote a masterpiece to be proud of, nice one Sotto
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Date: 10/10/2022 2:35:00 PM
A panorama of feelings, thoughts, and ideas that are displaying the beauty of your poetic ability, my dearest friend, Lasaad. Impressive! Be blessed!
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Date: 10/10/2022 9:43:00 AM
Reads like a good contender for the contest. Very expressive and descriptive work. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 10/10/2022 6:44:00 AM
Wow, Lasaad the last time i wrote a poem like this, is when i was withdrawing from some bad medication. I like the shape the constant falling giving the reader the feel of the abyss. All in all a well constructed poem, Harry
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Date: 10/10/2022 5:57:00 AM
Highly emotive write my friend. Your creativity on display throughout.
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Date: 10/10/2022 2:55:00 AM
great composition. Always interesting.
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