A Fate Worse Than Depth

Below the Surface, something Boils Something Seethes and something Churns Something Wakes; it Stirs - Uncoils! Something Aches and something Burns Something festers, something stings For relief my Psyche screams! Waves of Calm and soothing Song, Alas! Are things of Dreams...

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Robin Davis

Date: 12/20/2013 4:47:00 PM

Chan my friend I hope whatever this something is doesn't turn you evil or into a monster. LOL I like the sweet and charming Chan I have come to know. Nice job on this one Thanks for the truthful and kind comment on my Childish Behavior poem. Hugs and Love Sweet Pea

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 12/21/2013 8:05:00 AM

I'm as mean as I am kind, as good as I am evil. My life revolves around paradoxes lol

Danesh Morgan

Date: 8/29/2013 8:19:00 AM

this is something good or bad depends who is reading this. . . for me its so beautiful. . . you are right gives the reader to guess and wonder. . what's wrong wit that?

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/29/2013 8:48:00 AM

Your kind words are very much appreciated, Danesh; I'm glad you agree with me about not forcing a particular "something" on the reader, that they may guess it for themselves. Thank you for popping in and reviewing :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/20/2013 7:22:00 PM

Nice play on words!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/22/2013 7:38:00 PM

Many have opinions but it doesn't make them right.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/21/2013 9:08:00 AM

Thanks, Richard! I was quite apprehensive about posting this one because it got tore to SHREDS on another poetry site. The repetition of the word "something" bothered everyone and the title was panned as..."silly" I guess. I didn't want to come out and declare what MY "something" is; I wanted the reader to decide what their "something" is on their own.