1 Year Later I Do Not Breath Part 2

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Part 2 to "My Mind is Yours"

I Do not Breath I do no think Of life that mocked me I do not think Of elders who forgot me I do not think Of my depression I do not think Of hell on earth I do not think at all Anymore I shall hang from the rafters You can all laugh now I am as dead As when I was alive No difference at all Bury me in that poppers grave Beside the man of god who was the devils slave He is in hell, and there shall I reside too Taunting his perversions for all of eternity

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/24/2015 8:04:00 AM

I think you meant "I do not breathe" not to be a pain but I think you might have meant pauper's grave. Despite a few technical changes I love the piece, dark and delicious!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 2/25/2015 9:25:00 PM

Well if by technical changes you mean things like spelling and grammer, you got that one right, I am the best poetic misspeller you ever did read!!!! Eileen caught one, so I guess that makes my second best quality procrastination! :)

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/22/2015 10:17:00 PM

your darkness turns me on :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 2/22/2015 10:20:00 PM

Are you roping me in here? :) Thanks so much Cas! :) hugs xoxo

Jan Allison

Date: 2/22/2015 7:32:00 AM

From the picture she looks a bit like death warmed up Arthur:- Is a poppers grave for rich paupers who need to get high? Seriously a deep and powerful write my friend:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 2/22/2015 5:04:00 AM

Intrigued by the number of views, now I know why. Darn dark and "light" poetry has everyone in a frenzy...Awesome though for me...::D Kim

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/22/2015 1:24:00 AM

When we reach that low point of our life then a way remains: UPWARDS! A great poem depicting the struggle in our souls, a struggle that proves the dynamism in us, this innate power that will liberate us from the chains of despair! Deep and powerful dear, Arthur! A seven!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/22/2015 12:35:00 AM

Superb....I believe there are those who are walking dead. Life can be so cruel, Arthur. Great write....Shouldn't there be an E after breath? Hugs

Arthur Vaso
Date: 2/22/2015 12:39:00 AM

Yes I do believe you are correct, poor girl was so dead she forgot the darn E !!!! Hugs!