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02.02.2024

Anne-Lise Andresen
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P h a n t o m step dried clay tracks Stage lights arching as a bridge S e q u i n s indifferent Dance steps sawdust in the shoes G l a z e d eyes scans razor sharp The sound of the blacksmith's anvil kills the piggy bank S e a g u l l scream opens up to fear C l a m digging in gravel and sand bottoms One white shirt flutters in the wind T r a c k i n g the deer knee high boots Don't run away tax to pay A quiet retreat soul's goal Thoughts and e m o t i o n s internal growing stalk S i l e n c e speaks in volume still roaring the tempest

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Date: 2/12/2024 11:53:00 AM
This speaks to me of the driving indiffernce That life pushes at us Anne-Lise..Well put.'
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Date: 2/7/2024 3:00:00 PM
Silence can be more powerful than words. Nicely done. love phyl
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Date: 2/6/2024 8:21:00 PM
"S i l e n c e speaks in volume still roaring the tempest"...... What a powerful image...! I feel the tempest roaring in silence! It speaks through silence the chaos and turbulence of a heart. Even in the shift from one thought to the other, there is an underlying hint of something so frightening and ominous. Powerful poem dear Anne. Love and hugs
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Date: 2/6/2024 8:27:00 AM
This is a litany of ideas, going from one vision to another. So interesting. Hugs
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Date: 2/6/2024 6:49:00 AM
Hi Anne-Lise, an imagery rich poem of vibrancy. Makes one think. Bravissimo! Many blessings to you. ~
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Date: 2/6/2024 4:54:00 AM
Oh my, dear Anne-Lise, this is an evocative, thought-provoking and soul-moving poem!! Especially, those ending lines are absolutely introspective "S i l e n c e speaks in volume still roaring the tempest" I agree, silence roars in volumes. Your thoughts really jump from one to another in this poem, especially with imagery and metaphors, you've conveyed deep insight. A brilliant write, sending you light and best wishes always ~ keep writing and shining.
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Date: 2/4/2024 11:49:00 PM
Anne Lise this poem takes me from one thought to another, rather chaotically melding ideas. From phantoms leaving tracks through a gamete of visions, culminating in silence speaking volumes and an explosion of a tempest still roaring. Wow I was out of breath just reading it. Its wonderful.. one thing though.. When my dog is silent - I get very suspicious !. Hugs dear one, you did well !
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Date: 2/4/2024 4:09:00 AM
Thinking Shakespeare, though, Game of Thrones might be in there too. Why does tax evoke such pain?
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:21:00 PM
- Nobody loves tax ... a great stew you mean ... :))) - Thank you for your comment, Paul :) - hugs
Date: 2/3/2024 11:28:00 AM
Wow This is a thought-provoking and evocative poem, which reminds us of the richness and complexity of the human experience, where beauty and chaos, silence and noise, converge in a symphony of life.
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:22:00 PM
- More chaos than beauty, I would think S.O. :) - Thank you for your comment :) - hugs
Date: 2/3/2024 10:24:00 AM
Creative writing on many topics. Nice work.
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:23:00 PM
- Thank you for your comment, Jay :) - hugs
Date: 2/3/2024 6:02:00 AM
Emotional void resonates throughout, Anne-Lise. Ending spells the essence: S i l e n c e speaks in volume still roaring the tempest.
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:24:00 PM
- Silence can be overwhelming, Vijay :) - Thank you for your comment :) - hugs
Date: 2/3/2024 2:34:00 AM
Ah those last lines hit so strong and is soul stirring. I agree silence speaks volumes of the truth that we endure and walk through everyday. Love how thoughts and emotions that youv delivered here really goes with the picture youv used too. Brilliant. Pleasure reading your work always. Sending you light
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:27:00 PM
- A hectic everyday life ... can offer most things in our world ... seconds of many sound effects and images - Thank you for your comment, Ink :) - hugs
Date: 2/3/2024 12:05:00 AM
great writing, and very creative, enjoyed all lines, yann
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:33:00 PM
- When everything is mixed in "one pot" it becomes chaos... in our thoughts ... the "carousel" rolls around the clock, Yann :) - Thank you for your comment :) - hugs
Date: 2/2/2024 7:47:00 PM
That seagull scream got Me! Great writing!
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:32:00 PM
- Thank you for your comment, Kim :) - hugs
Date: 2/2/2024 4:18:00 PM
A strong poem and interesting travel. Thanks fr enjoyment.
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:34:00 PM
- Thank you for your comment, Hilda :) - hugs
Date: 2/2/2024 3:23:00 PM
I found the structure of your poem beautifully unique...made for a pleasant reading experience. I especially liked "a quiet retreat, soul's goal..thoughts and emotion internal growing stalk...silence speaks in volume...just wow, hugs, Sara
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Date: 2/4/2024 12:41:00 PM
- A quiet retreat ... we need it in our busy lives ... everything we have to accomplish in a day ... always present ... (we don't go to the toilet without the mobile phone)... the carousel spins ... and we "spin along" - Thank you for your comment, Sara :) - hugs

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