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Jan. 1- 2024
Winter's Slumber Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Regina MacIntosh

 

 

In the smiting chill of a dreadful wintry night When through every fiber n’ nerve, was the cold bite, I was sitting cocooned beside my hearth, Sipping a cup of steaming tea of my choicest blend. Suddenly my attention was caught by something moving, Through my window I saw a shadowy figure. But who would dare to be out on such a night? It was a night when winter slumber suddenly had grown, Into a blizzard with blinding snow and hail flooding When the land lay blanketed under snow’s strangulating clutch When leafless trees stood motionless like spectral shadows When animals stayed in their boroughs or dens in hibernation But what I thought I had seen earlier Was not a whim or a figment of my imagination. I clearly saw someone walking, moving slowly or stealthily. It disturbed me and I wanted to know who he was. Unlikely to be a robber or a rogue with some sinister intent. Could be a man who lost his way and needed urgent help. Impelled by an irresistible urge to find out who he was, I plunged myself into the sea of snow holding on to faith. Faint moon light was shimmering between dancing snowflakes. Not quite sure if I would find an enemy or a friend, I walked on, pledging I would face what might come. As I moved closer to that tottering figure I realized he was someone half frozen in snow, Desperately trying to get back home, And I was on a divine mission to be the hands of God, To direct a waylaid traveler back home, And save a helpless soul from being frozen to death. I don’t know what happened to that man beyond that night, But am sure, he has survived many more winters, And would be thankful to God for the providential help, That saved his drowning life on such a fateful wintry night. Now when I think of it, I feel even a bleak winter day, Can be made bright by the power of kindness that we show. It is the concern and preparedness to help someone in trouble, That ignites our hearts with a divine spark and helps us connect.

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Date: 1/11/2024 1:01:00 PM
Back with my congratulations. you did very well for not having snow where you are.
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Date: 1/8/2024 7:45:00 AM
Wonderful poetry! Congratulations on your placement!
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Date: 1/8/2024 6:56:00 AM
Wonderful read. Love it. Congrats and God bless you, love, Gina
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Date: 1/3/2024 9:19:00 AM
I am curious about this one I read the other day. Is it a true story?
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Valsa George
Date: 1/6/2024 7:18:00 PM
No Andrea, it is fictional... ! We don't have snow here.
Date: 1/3/2024 5:39:00 AM
Your poem perfectly depicts the deep influence of empathy and comfort that a simple act of kindness may exude, Valsa. Your poems serve as an ominous reminder of the lingering impact of sympathy and bonds of friendship in an era that can at times appear distant and disinterested. In 2024, I wish you a wonderful New Year full of plenty and satisfaction!
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Date: 1/2/2024 6:50:00 PM
Bless you, Valsa, for your kind and loving heart. Your poem was amazing. Engaging from the first line throughout. The imagery and the use of alliteration was pleasing as I read your tale. It was intense and mysterious. A FAV for my list, and a great entry for the contest, my dear friend. Good luck! The feeling of God's presence and His working through us is blissful. Happy New Year! Have a great 2024! Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 1/2/2024 8:18:00 AM
It's so nice you helped him out. Very. Nice story, Valsa.
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Date: 1/2/2024 1:36:00 AM
Sweet Valsa, I abandoned you a bit, but now I will start again. A happy New Year. You will always be appreciated.
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Date: 1/1/2024 9:10:00 PM
Ah happy new year sweet valsa, i hope this year is the year you will be publishing a short book of stories for children, and more, with moral values and lessons delivered through your well woven words. You really have that in you, and it is an honor for us soupers to be able to read and appreciate your work, which is so profound! You’ve really nailed it! The depth and flow of this is truly soul stirring and makes one ponder and think. I believe in kindness, kindness and love can make a huge dif
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Date: 1/1/2024 9:12:00 PM
Difference.., your beginning made me want to read more .. and the ending made me stop and be in awe! Touched amazing by your storytelling skills that is so poetic and artistic! You are truly a gifted poetess! Sending you light always. Definitely a fave for me and aso best wishes for the contest
Date: 1/1/2024 4:17:00 PM
an engaging story in poetic form--one that grabbed me from the start. Not only are you a poet, you're also a great storyteller. So many awesome phrases I have difficulty finding just one to like. I was taken by this line: even a bleak winter day, Can be made bright by the power of kindness that we show. Even in the darkness, kindness brightens the path and lifts the load. Perhaps you were an angel that night? I was relieved to know that you helped the stranger. A masterpiece. Am faving!
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:04:00 AM
What a wonderful story teller you are. Fabulous writing!
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Date: 1/1/2024 6:01:00 AM
Great poem, great message Valsa. None of us should be fairweather helpers. Awesome lesson to start the year
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Date: 1/1/2024 4:49:00 AM
This is such a meaningful write, dear poetess. I'm in awe everytime I read your words, full of moral values, poetic depth and philosophical richness, conveyed so wisely that they directly reach the heart.. Your prowess in storytelling is absolutely impeccable as I could feel my heart beats racing in eagerness, following the storyline here, especially when discovering who the stranger actually was.. Kindness is a powerful potion that can heal an aching heart, or maybe, atleast give us relief in
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Date: 1/1/2024 4:51:00 AM
those gloomy moments.. All one needs is an empathetic aura and understanding, without any judgement.. Your poem dives deep into those thoughts.. This one goes in my FAVs instantly, so beautifully written.. Wow!! You should truly write more of such storytelling pieces, they are a bliss to read.. Well, you're brilliant at writing about everything!!
Date: 1/1/2024 4:41:00 AM
Your poem beautifully captures the transformative power of compassion and the warmth that can emanate from a simple act of kindness. Here are some ways you might comment on it.. The vivid description of the wintry night and the selfless act of helping a stranger creates a powerful emotional impact.. The universal message of your poem is both timeless and timely. In a world that can sometimes feel cold and indifferent, your words remind us of the enduring power of empathy and connection. love it
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Date: 1/1/2024 4:00:00 AM
A wonderful story told in poetic form with a good moral at the end that should guide us to better living. Thanks for sharing your story with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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