Sucker

kiss of venus fly trap suck the marrow from my bones, encase my heart, secrete, dissolve the myth of wings... death be true to death *love,death or truth may be the sanctuary depending on the situation.

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Hyunjin Ryoo

Date: 10/9/2010 2:05:00 PM

A wonderful poem... well devised, well put. Thank you for sharing.

Francine Roberts

Date: 10/7/2010 8:21:00 AM

wonderful entry , congrats on your win in the contest

John Freeman

Date: 10/6/2010 5:02:00 PM

Congratulations Debbie on your worthy poem's top ten spot. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/6/2010 3:22:00 PM

Congrats Debbie on your win in Chris's contest with this excellent Tanka entry.. a super piece ..enjoy your win today with luv...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2010 2:48:00 PM

Congratulations, Deb, and I just noticed how interesting your title is as well!! Luv, Andrea

James Fraser

Date: 10/6/2010 12:52:00 PM

Many congratulations Deborah on your win in Chris's contest with this fine Tanka >> James

Wilma Neels

Date: 10/6/2010 11:30:00 AM

So much truth Deborah. Totally agree with you. Enjoyed your Tanka and congratulations on your win in the Contest ;)

Joyce Johnson

Date: 10/6/2010 10:46:00 AM

Not everyone seeks the same sanctuary, true. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/6/2010 10:36:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Deborah in Chris D. Aechtner's contest "T(h)anka You". Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/6/2010 5:56:00 AM

Congratulations on this well deserved win, Debbie

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/6/2010 1:34:00 AM

interesting subject this is. congrats in contest placemnt, enjoyed this. Harry

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 10/5/2010 11:29:00 PM

coming back here to say congrats :) really enjoyed this one ^_^ and haha hmmm those verses in haiku costumes just might inspire me to write more of it-- haha anything for an excuse to go crazy ;) --nikko :)

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 10/5/2010 11:01:00 PM

Congrats on your success in the contest..something to think about in this one. BG

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/30/2010 7:28:00 AM

interesting Tanka, enjoyed this. Harry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2010 4:42:00 PM

Deb, I didn't tell people how to do a title for their entries, but it is ok if you just make a title for your haiku or use the first line of your haiku for the title!! Luv, Andrea

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/24/2010 6:13:00 PM

this sure is unique layers to it-- really enjoyed the meanings that this can hold--wish you the best in the contest :) -- nikko :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/24/2010 2:26:00 PM

profound....it doesn't take many words or lines for some poems to say a lot. :)

James Fraser

Date: 9/24/2010 11:07:00 AM

Dark Tanka Deborah, you just may end up on the winners podium with this poetry, good luck. Thank you for reading 'Looking Back' much appreciated. Have a wonderful weekend >> James

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 9/23/2010 9:23:00 PM

It is a very serious one. What a beauty you have sketched 'suck the marrow from my bones' in this awesome write on a theme like death. Great words. Inspired from your Blog I have placed a new Poem as a gift for all my poetry Soup friends. Hope you would like it. Love and best wishes ...Ravindra...Deborah Guzzi.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/23/2010 8:42:00 PM

Seems very cynical, Deb. I love that line , Dissolve the myth of wings. And the title sure goes well with it. good luck in the contest. LUv, Andrea

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/23/2010 4:58:00 PM

Very uinique theme you vhave created for sanctuary, Debbie. Good luck in the contest.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/23/2010 3:41:00 PM

strange one....enjoyed {8:}{ )( ][ ><