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Preclusive Vows (First Love)

My first-ever, worst-ever crush who made me blush was an altar boy Golden blonde hair and a face so fair graced the frame of my altar boy And not in the least, he wished to be a priest but sent me Valentines He so gently, not accidently, held my hand, this coy altar boy Priests cannot marry and I was quite wary when my books he would carry My face flushed as I blushed, seeing no future beside my altar boy He’d have no mate yet wanted to date as he knew of my attraction He would take vows that would not allow me to arouse this altar boy Without attack I still look back and wonder what might have developed If Devon's first-ever romance endeavor wasn't an altar boy

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/28/2010 9:36:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Joe Flach's contest "First Time". Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2010 7:56:00 PM

Sweet poem, Carolyn! wow, what a different kind of first crush (it beats Mighty Mouse though, haha) How are you there? Congrats for your win. Andrea

Mitch White

Date: 6/21/2010 2:59:00 AM

Very talented write- touching to say the least- Congrats to you Carolyn

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/20/2010 2:29:00 PM

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Audrey Haick

Date: 6/19/2010 8:45:00 PM

My warm congratulations, dearest Carolyn on your 7th Place win in the contest! This is really sad to me...but life is full of all these twists and turns but all lead us onward. Much love, Audrey

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/19/2010 1:50:00 PM

Maybe just maybe I would not be wondering too hey :) enjoy this a lot Carolyn.. Congrats luv WN

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/19/2010 11:12:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Joe Flach's contest "First Time" Carolyn. Always a pleasure to read your poetry. Love, Carol

Joe Flach

Date: 6/18/2010 7:08:00 PM

Carolyn, thank you for entering this interesting poem in my contest. Interesting in both the story and the style. You chose a very difficult poetic style to tell a very creative tale. Nicely done. Joe

Tirzah Conway

Date: 6/18/2010 6:42:00 PM

How sweet and sad at the same time-first love is tough anyway, but to know that nothing can come of it has got to be hard!Congrats on your win!~Tirzah~

Joyce Johnson

Date: 6/18/2010 5:42:00 PM

How very sweet. I wonder how his life turned out. Congratulations Carolyn. Love, Joyce

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/18/2010 4:49:00 PM

smile but it was safe and innocent and guiless...charming..just charming! congrad's Light & Love

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/18/2010 3:08:00 PM

Congrats on your winning poem in Joe's contest .. nice one ..with luv from the "Sweetheart"

Audrey Haick

Date: 4/28/2010 7:37:00 AM

Carolyn, warm congratulations on your amazing win with this Ghazal!! Enjoy it!!! Love, Audrey

Margaret Foster

Date: 4/27/2010 9:10:00 PM

I think if I had seen this before I entered I would not have bothered. A great write Carolyn, a tender little story all in this difficult form Well done. congrats...Margaret

Marty Owens

Date: 4/27/2010 7:43:00 PM

Congratulations on your win...enjoyed...Marty

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/27/2010 3:18:00 PM

Congrats Carolyn on your winning poem in Jared's contest ... amazing and awesome write and win my friend..luv.. Linda-Marie..

Jared Pickett

Date: 4/27/2010 12:50:00 PM

It was a toss up between this and three other poems to take the grand prize... I agree with all twenty comments.... This Alter Boy inspired a wonderful poem... I am glad it was my contest that sparked such a delightful thought.... Congratulations on your rank.... You are one of my favorite poets here on the soup and am happy to award you with this third place victory..... EXCELLENT.....:JP]

Constance La France

Date: 4/11/2010 6:19:00 PM

I found this verse form very difficult also, but you did a great job with this story of Devon, the romantic alterboy... love constance

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 4/10/2010 2:41:00 AM

My curiosity is peeked. Did he become a priest? Nice ghazal, Carolyn.

Mary Meade Stephenson

Date: 4/6/2010 8:05:00 AM

Great write here Carolyn and it does look to be quite tough. Good luck in Jared's contest. Memories are so great to write about. Thanks so much for sharing and for taking the time to read my writes. Have a beautifully blessed day~Mary~

James Fraser

Date: 4/4/2010 6:02:00 AM

My it does look a toughie to write, good luck in the contest Carolyn >> James

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 4/3/2010 11:11:00 AM

You have courage, you have Miss. I admire you tackling the form as I can not imagine how I might do such. Happy Easter! Regards, Gerard

Brian Strand

Date: 4/2/2010 11:30:00 PM

Thank you for your welcome blog comments today Carolyn.Rgds Brian

Lynette Chachere

Date: 4/2/2010 4:35:00 PM

Wow, you put your meaning into very creative words. he must have been determined to be a priest then, that would be a hard trial. cute write as well. -Always&Forever Lynette

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2010 8:42:00 AM

Carolyn, is this a true story? YOu did well with the form. I need to check it out sometime, but it will take me forever just to do my assignment from constance. Thanks for admitting you fell for my April fools joke. I wonder how many read it and just didnt' comment. hahaha. I guess I better take it down since it's not April 1 anymore, but it feels nice having it there. Wish it was true! Luv, Andrea