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He sat on a small smelly stool, crooked fishing rod in hand. At times he nodded in slumber, at times he pulled his oblique line, baited his hook, and threw it back into the muddy waters of the river. He was always there, weather permitting. He came from nowhere and disappeared from sight. I wondered who he was. Such is life, men come, men go, oft we wonder who they are. Oft we're too lazy to care since our narcissus attitude excludes all strangers, it was our habit. Was it not easier for me to move up to him and ask, strike a conversation on nonsensical ideas, and become indifferent friends? Instead I turned my back and went back to my house which once I called a home.

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Date: 8/24/2022 12:30:00 PM
Well captured! How should be neighbors are left strangers.
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Date: 7/28/2022 4:19:00 AM
Your poem speaks a lot about the 'estrangement' that is prevailing in today's world...So well said and expressed... and you highlighted the difference between a 'home' and a 'house'.... Sorry I couldn't get enough time to read many of your beautiful creations and of other dear Soup friends... I will surely try to find more time to read... Have a blessed day... ~ Ani
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Date: 7/28/2022 12:42:00 AM
A smile and a chat does wonders for a lonely soul Victor. I’m so sorry your house doesn’t feel like home now the heart of it is missing. Take care of yourself… Belle
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Date: 7/27/2022 7:07:00 AM
HI Victor excellent poetry, who know who he was, maybe someone that wanted to attract your attention, but we all sometimes make the same mistake sad to hear your home no more, but just a house, maybe the fact that your wonderful wife has unfortunately passed and it no longer feels like home. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Jennifer.
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Date: 7/27/2022 3:50:00 AM
Indifference is personified by a home that is now just a house, subtle wording...Delice
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Date: 7/26/2022 9:40:00 PM
You reminded me of my husband and his love for fishing a peaceful time of him to have patience. But I would be the different sort , curiosity kills the cat, I would go up and make small talk. Blessings my friend
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Date: 7/26/2022 3:45:00 PM
Victor, I like your description of the man. He's someone I could see fishing on the banks of description You moved well from description to life philosophy. I wonder why your house is no longer a home.
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Date: 7/26/2022 3:33:00 PM
Sad, to not meet someone that may have been there just to help you my friend. There's a reason for all the things and people that are on the path our lives take. Happy trails to you, Victor. Bill
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Date: 7/26/2022 6:26:00 AM
"Men come and men go Often we wonder who they are" How true and so beautifully written... Loved the emotions throughout...
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Date: 7/25/2022 6:52:00 PM
It must have been the smelly stool that stopped you, think about it. The idea of fishing, worms, saltwater smells, can be subconsciously a trigger that stops you in your tracks. We should learn to overcome these obstacles, bring a rod next time, (an ice breaker). Be the smells. The writing is very cozy and naturalistic, as if it came from a classic novel.
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Date: 7/25/2022 3:46:00 PM
I say best talk to the stranger, you never know when you may be hosting an angel, or the least, you make a connection that may some day be a friend , but I know its hard to do just that, Love , vie
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Date: 7/25/2022 2:23:00 PM
Sometimes it is good to befriend someone then sometimes it is not. I hope you made the right decision. I enjoyed reading your work. Your visit to my page made me stop and think. Sara
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Date: 7/25/2022 1:35:00 PM
A moment in time, reflected on, and well described, Victor
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Date: 7/25/2022 9:56:00 AM
There is so much sadness, in this beautifully written piece.....souls longing, souls turning away, souls in need. :)Paulette
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Date: 7/25/2022 9:10:00 AM
Strangers are potential friends, and it begins with a hello. It's sad to think of such an opportunity missed. Great writing, my friend.
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Date: 7/25/2022 7:14:00 AM
Hi Victor, there are times when I should keep myself to myself and yet I have to speak. Most of the time it ends well but on those few occasions, it ends badly. We have two souls who are alone, maybe they both have need of just being with someone, talking. As always, Victor, you hold the attention of the reader from beginning to end in this somewhat sad write. You love to play with the emotions methinks. Has to be a fave. Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs always ..... Mike. XX
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Date: 7/25/2022 6:58:00 AM
This poem is so poignant, Victor etched with a sadness, yet so moving..Truly it is lovely poetry
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Date: 7/25/2022 6:45:00 AM
Victor, your writing is so eloquently detailed. You are able to hold the reader's attention throughout the entire piece. I am able to hear the yearning of two sensitive souls who are alone.
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Date: 7/25/2022 6:42:00 AM
two souls, each lost in the whimsy of themselves. Beautifully written Victor.. I read it twice and each time it grew in questions I shall ponder through the day....and further....
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Date: 7/25/2022 6:07:00 AM
I hear two poignant souls aching in solitude. Wonderfully descriptive write, Victor, that captures the reader from start to finish.
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Date: 7/25/2022 4:55:00 AM
A sad but nice reminder to always be mindful and thoughtful toward others and take time to say hello and connect. Lovely Victor . Debx
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Date: 7/25/2022 4:52:00 AM
In our busy narcisstic living, we have no time to spare for others or enquire who the stranger we chance to meet ! We get estranged from everybody and confine ourselves to our home that lacks the warmth of a home. You have mirrored the times beautifully well Victor!
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Date: 7/25/2022 4:35:00 AM
People nowadays are quite wary of others but it's often said that strangers are just friends we haven't met yet.. Tom
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Date: 7/25/2022 4:30:00 AM
Victor, a good reminder that we sometimes have to work at what seems unnatural to us, to get outside ourselves, and connect. Well done, friend.
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Date: 7/25/2022 4:25:00 AM
A sad loneliness to this one.
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