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Nadir

Summer's salty doom knocked ruggedly as I lay on the sheets of tormented threats and turmoil. Jerks at the slightest beep. Gasps at a faint knock. Soaked in muddy debts of frauds. A muscle pull of shame, death's soulful companion. The world didn't stop cascading. I did. My brain froze. My veins couldn't remember my blood, and I could feel its stiffness through my cold skin. I stopped living. It felt like he who created time set me on a boundless, devastating fall. I was a lagomorph of enchanted snares. A labyrinth of taloned twists. The anatomy of lingered pain. Where the back of my brain no longer received prompts, maybe because I had weaved pain so much that its loins found solace in my abdomen, intertwined with my soul's verisimilitude. Nadia's fist and pals alike. Appeared to grip me. But I craved aloneness. I couldn't tell which hand was a viper. Fluids of thunderous tangerine mines jogged my customized gaze. It was neither a feeling nor an emotion. It was dreadful emptiness, same with the physical state of my hut. A presage of betrayed thoughts entangled through my darkness. Decorated in beige clouds of adversity, I sunk into a spellbound loophole. A rend of rageful vaquita Invaded my closed Lacuna, Filled with sharks of injuries Ready to let loose. I plunged into a cynosure of drunken tenebrosity. Like a mishap, unheeded. You would think I was a Leadless peregrine in escort Of blinded dolphins. I dug into the earth's inner core. My eyes went blurry. I could breathe the juices of my burnt spirit. I should have left. The pit of cause. But even the mirror couldn't recognize itself through me, so how could I? How could I have found myself? In a mind sea filled with shattered, blurry memories and murdered mundane desires. I was despair and denial in a basket of calls. Muted mutation in caskets of answers. Bones birthed blood. Fractions purged from my spine. I was a nightmare, the kind with lashes of stale runes drawn like tattoos with fermented, ghastly inks. I was the ocean—merciless. A curse tied to a repetitive fate. The water in me represented the seasonal tears, and unlike humans, mine never dried up. A constant reminder of bloated anguish. Every day, I watched people find pleasure in my pain when they looked at me, when they touched me. Their laughter and tranquillity threw me to the depths of myself. My demise.

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Date: 9/25/2024 8:11:00 PM
glad i came across them gem tonight - that opening stanza has bite
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Tonye George
Date: 11/15/2024 2:20:00 PM
Oh Mat. I'm glad you did too. I appreciate you for checking through.
Date: 8/3/2024 1:04:00 AM
"It was neither a feeling nor an emotion. It was dreadful emptiness, same with the physical state of my hut". A sad poem but so full of emotion and imagery. Congrats for your win.
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Tonye George
Date: 11/15/2024 2:20:00 PM
I'm grateful, thank you Victor.
Date: 8/1/2024 8:59:00 PM
Wow! Congratulations! Thanks for sharing this. Thanks likewise for your uplifting comments. God bless you.
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Date: 7/31/2024 12:36:00 PM
How did I miss this excellent poem.. Your poem powerfully conveys the experience of being consumed by internal pain and confusion. The use of dense, metaphorical language creates a visceral representation of the speaker's emotional state, making it both relatable and haunting. The poem's conclusion, with its reference to the constant, unending nature of the speaker's tears, leaves a lingering sense of melancholy and hopelessness, underscoring the theme of enduring, unresolvable despair.
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Date: 7/28/2024 11:32:00 PM
I expected this poem to be a top winner. Back to your powerful poem with Congratulations on your win dear Tonye.
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:28:00 AM
My dear V. Thank you so much. Wouldn't be bad to be 3 times in a roll. Hahaha. I appreciate you.
Date: 7/28/2024 3:02:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your well deserved top win! Keep shining and sharing talented soul
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:30:00 AM
Thank you so much dearest Ink. I appreciate you.
Date: 7/28/2024 2:58:00 PM
Tonye, this is absolutely brilliant! One of my favorites, I might add. Congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:29:00 AM
Thank you so much Edward. I appreciate. Always a pleasure.
Date: 7/28/2024 7:35:00 AM
Wow. I don't even know what to say! I'll need to reread and define ALOT of words but the feeling this left me with was the essence of the title word. So I know this is great writing! Congratulations!! Xo
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:30:00 AM
I'm sure Crystol. Thank you so much Dear.
Date: 7/27/2024 8:46:00 PM
awesome. congratulations dear poet. happy writing.
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:31:00 AM
Thank you Mysore. I appreciate your warmth.
Date: 7/23/2024 5:09:00 AM
powerful is quite right. i love, love, love this poem and the way it is written.
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:31:00 AM
Ah! Thank you loads Hiba. I appreciate.
Date: 7/22/2024 1:49:00 PM
What a powerful/creative write. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a fun day with words...................
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Tonye George
Date: 7/29/2024 8:32:00 AM
My dear Paula. I appreciate your kindness. Thank you so much.
Date: 7/22/2024 6:13:00 AM
Back again on this gem. Saw your comment to Valsa. I guess we've all had a nadir (is it possible to have more than one?) at some point. I hope your life is happy now and filled with light
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Tonye George
Date: 7/22/2024 11:43:00 AM
Yeah, it's possible to have two. Life throws one and Love throws the other. I'm definitely in a happy place. God is good, thank you, Tom.
Date: 7/18/2024 3:00:00 AM
Where do i start praising this poetic gem so sincerely woven in such eloquence! I love dark poetry and its not everyday i get read them here and youv written on with clever metaphors and descriptive diction! And blew me away! In awe of your poetic prowess talented soul! Sometimes when weve seen so much in life we crave that aloneness. I especially love “ I was the ocean—merciless. A curse tied to a repetitive fate. The water in me represented the seasonal tears, and unlike humans” wow i can resonate with that. In your poem you did mention nadias? Did you want to write “ nadir” maybe.. anyhow! This is a fave for me and best wishes beautiful
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Tonye George
Date: 7/18/2024 7:05:00 AM
Thank you sweetest Inky. I appreciate you your wonderful insight and support. Always. No it's not Nadir, it's Nadia. It's a name. My friend's name actually. Hugs.
Date: 7/18/2024 2:19:00 AM
You loosed all punches here and told it like it was, bleeding ink with a pen that is simply magic, your amazing T, take care and keep writing these spells that make the world cry and heal, L)
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Tonye George
Date: 7/18/2024 7:07:00 AM
Thank you so much, Rosey. I appreciate your support. Cheers.
Date: 7/17/2024 9:02:00 PM
Tonye, your dark and masterfully written poem, delves the depths of despair with powerful images. Much enjoyed!
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Tonye George
Date: 7/17/2024 9:54:00 PM
Hey Evelyn. Thank you so much.
Date: 7/17/2024 6:46:00 PM
Your kaleidoscope of dark imagery leaves me 'jaw-dropped.' Bravo, Tonye!
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Tonye George
Date: 7/17/2024 9:48:00 PM
Thank you Gersh. I appreciate.
Date: 7/17/2024 1:25:00 PM
You have a lot of very powerful and awesome images in this poem. I wish I could have done something more with the theme with my own rendering if Nadir the way you did !!
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Tonye George
Date: 7/17/2024 9:56:00 PM
Oh, thank you, dear Andrea. I appreciate. Nadir is a point no one wants to be in twice.
Date: 7/17/2024 7:05:00 AM
The use of theatrical metaphors keeps my mind elevated in such a way, the alliteration, and raw emotions wrapped it up."A curse tied to a repetitive fate. The water in me represented the seasonal tears, and unlike humans, mine never dried up." wow, Tonye!
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Tonye George
Date: 7/17/2024 9:57:00 PM
Thank you, Anaya. I wondered if the water in the ocean was tears that could never run dry.
Date: 7/17/2024 5:48:00 AM
Good gosh if this doesn't win I don't know what will. I couldn't help but think of Job as I was reading this. "I dug into the Earth's inner core..." You can't go much lower than that. "I couldn't tell which hand was a viper...". I think of Job's three false friends, accusing him, making him sink lower. Anyway, you're a class A poet Tonye
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/28/2024 7:39:00 AM
Yess thought about Job to!
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Tonye George
Date: 7/17/2024 9:50:00 PM
Oh, Tom. Now I think about it your way. That's something else. Job has the crown for the most intense Nadir. Thank you very much, Dear Tom. I try.
Date: 7/17/2024 5:21:00 AM
This poem is so powerful with a series of arresting metaphors presenting one reeling in the grip of agony. "It was neither a feeling nor an emotion. It was dreadful emptiness, same with the physical state of my hut". This emptiness is indeed dreadful. If we feel that others find pleasure in seeing us caught in the throes of pain, it makes things even harder. This poem shows the overwhelming nature of despair. Instead of surrendering to such defeatist thoughts, what is needed is resilience. Remember, it is in the darkest nights that stars shine brightest. I know you have created an atmosphere, purely fictional to suit the theme. Great entry, dear Tonye. All the Best.
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Tonye George
Date: 7/17/2024 9:53:00 PM
Thank you, dear Valsa. It was a reflective piece. There was a time when I was in my Nadir. I think that feeling helped me create this. Reading this again made me understand that I wrote in denial of my subconscious.

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