Nadir

Summer's salty doom knocked
ruggedly as I lay on the
sheets of tormented
threats and turmoil.
Jerks at the slightest beep. 
Gasps at a faint knock. 
Soaked in muddy debts
of frauds. A muscle pull of shame, 
death's soulful companion. 
The world didn't stop cascading. 
I did. My brain froze. 
My veins couldn't remember my blood, 
and I could feel its stiffness through my 
cold skin. I stopped living. 
It felt like he who created time set 
me on a boundless, devastating fall.

I was a lagomorph of 
enchanted snares. 
A labyrinth of taloned twists. 
The anatomy of lingered pain. 
Where the back of my brain no 
longer received prompts, 
maybe because I had weaved 
pain so much that its loins 
found solace in my abdomen, 
intertwined with 
my soul's verisimilitude.

Nadia's fist and pals alike.
Appeared to grip me.
But I craved aloneness. 
I couldn't tell which 
hand was a viper.

Fluids of thunderous tangerine 
mines jogged my customized gaze. 
It was neither a feeling nor an emotion.
It was dreadful emptiness, 
same with the physical state 
of my hut. A presage of 
betrayed thoughts entangled 
through my darkness. 
Decorated in beige clouds 
of adversity, I sunk into a 
spellbound loophole. 

A rend of rageful vaquita 
Invaded my closed Lacuna,
Filled with sharks of injuries 
Ready to let loose.
I plunged into a cynosure of 
drunken tenebrosity. 
Like a mishap, unheeded.
You would think I was a
Leadless peregrine in escort 
Of blinded dolphins. 
I dug into the earth's inner core.

My eyes went blurry. 
I could breathe the 
juices of my burnt spirit. 
I should have left. 
The pit of cause. 
But even the mirror couldn't
recognize itself through me, 
so how could I?
How could I have found myself? 
In a mind sea filled with shattered, 
blurry memories and 
murdered mundane desires. 
I was despair and denial 
in a basket of calls. 
Muted mutation in caskets of answers. Bones birthed blood. 
Fractions purged from my spine.

I was a nightmare, 
the kind with lashes of 
stale runes drawn like tattoos with fermented, ghastly inks. 
I was the ocean—merciless. 
A curse tied to a repetitive fate. 
The water in me represented 
the seasonal tears, and 
unlike humans, mine never dried up. 
A constant reminder of bloated anguish. Every day, I watched people 
find pleasure in my pain 
when they looked at me,
when they touched me. 
Their laughter and tranquillity 
threw me to the depths of myself. 
My demise.
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Buhagiar Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 1:04 AM
"It was neither a feeling nor an emotion. It was dreadful emptiness, same with the physical state of my hut". A sad poem but so full of emotion and imagery. Congrats for your win.
George Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 2:20 PM
I'm grateful, thank you Victor.
Agustin Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 8:59 PM
Wow! Congratulations! Thanks for sharing this. Thanks likewise for your uplifting comments. God bless you.
One Avatar
July 31, 2024 at 12:36 PM
How did I miss this excellent poem.. Your poem powerfully conveys the experience of being consumed by internal pain and confusion. The use of dense, metaphorical language creates a visceral representation of the speaker's emotional state, making it both relatable and haunting. The poem's conclusion, with its reference to the constant, unending nature of the speaker's tears, leaves a lingering sense of melancholy and hopelessness, underscoring the theme of enduring, unresolvable despair.
George Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 11:32 PM
I expected this poem to be a top winner. Back to your powerful poem with Congratulations on your win dear Tonye.
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:28 AM
My dear V. Thank you so much. Wouldn't be bad to be 3 times in a roll. Hahaha. I appreciate you.
Empress Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 3:02 PM
Back to congratulate you on your well deserved top win! Keep shining and sharing talented soul
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:30 AM
Thank you so much dearest Ink. I appreciate you.
Ibeh Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 2:58 PM
Tonye, this is absolutely brilliant! One of my favorites, I might add. Congratulations on your top win in my contest!
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:29 AM
Thank you so much Edward. I appreciate. Always a pleasure.
Woods Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 7:35 AM
Wow. I don't even know what to say! I'll need to reread and define ALOT of words but the feeling this left me with was the essence of the title word. So I know this is great writing! Congratulations!! Xo
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:30 AM
I'm sure Crystol. Thank you so much Dear.
mysore Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 8:46 PM
awesome. congratulations dear poet. happy writing.
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:31 AM
Thank you Mysore. I appreciate your warmth.
Junaid Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 5:09 AM
powerful is quite right. i love, love, love this poem and the way it is written.
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:31 AM
Ah! Thank you loads Hiba. I appreciate.
Goldsmith Avatar
July 22, 2024 at 1:49 PM
What a powerful/creative write. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a fun day with words...................
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 8:32 AM
My dear Paula. I appreciate your kindness. Thank you so much.
Empress Avatar
July 18, 2024 at 3:00 AM
Where do i start praising this poetic gem so sincerely woven in such eloquence! I love dark poetry and its not everyday i get read them here and youv written on with clever metaphors and descriptive diction! And blew me away! In awe of your poetic prowess talented soul! Sometimes when weve seen so much in life we crave that aloneness. I especially love “ I was the ocean—merciless. A curse tied to a repetitive fate. The water in me represented the seasonal tears, and unlike humans” wow i can resonate with that. In your poem you did mention nadias? Did you want to write “ nadir” maybe.. anyhow! This is a fave for me and best wishes beautiful
George Avatar
July 18, 2024 at 7:05 AM
Thank you sweetest Inky. I appreciate you your wonderful insight and support. Always. No it's not Nadir, it's Nadia. It's a name. My friend's name actually. Hugs.
Rose  Avatar
July 18, 2024 at 2:19 AM
You loosed all punches here and told it like it was, bleeding ink with a pen that is simply magic, your amazing T, take care and keep writing these spells that make the world cry and heal, L)
George Avatar
July 18, 2024 at 7:07 AM
Thank you so much, Rosey. I appreciate your support. Cheers.
Buehler Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 9:02 PM
Tonye, your dark and masterfully written poem, delves the depths of despair with powerful images. Much enjoyed!
George Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 9:54 PM
Hey Evelyn. Thank you so much.
Wolf Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 6:46 PM
Your kaleidoscope of dark imagery leaves me 'jaw-dropped.' Bravo, Tonye!
George Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 9:48 PM
Thank you Gersh. I appreciate.
Dietrich Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 1:25 PM
You have a lot of very powerful and awesome images in this poem. I wish I could have done something more with the theme with my own rendering if Nadir the way you did !!
George Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 9:56 PM
Oh, thank you, dear Andrea. I appreciate. Nadir is a point no one wants to be in twice.
Anaya Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 7:05 AM
The use of theatrical metaphors keeps my mind elevated in such a way, the alliteration, and raw emotions wrapped it up."A curse tied to a repetitive fate. The water in me represented the seasonal tears, and unlike humans, mine never dried up." wow, Tonye!
George Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 9:57 PM
Thank you, Anaya. I wondered if the water in the ocean was tears that could never run dry.
George Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 5:21 AM
This poem is so powerful with a series of arresting metaphors presenting one reeling in the grip of agony. "It was neither a feeling nor an emotion. It was dreadful emptiness, same with the physical state of my hut". This emptiness is indeed dreadful. If we feel that others find pleasure in seeing us caught in the throes of pain, it makes things even harder. This poem shows the overwhelming nature of despair. Instead of surrendering to such defeatist thoughts, what is needed is resilience. Remember, it is in the darkest nights that stars shine brightest. I know you have created an atmosphere, purely fictional to suit the theme. Great entry, dear Tonye. All the Best.
George Avatar
July 17, 2024 at 9:53 PM
Thank you, dear Valsa. It was a reflective piece. There was a time when I was in my Nadir. I think that feeling helped me create this. Reading this again made me understand that I wrote in denial of my subconscious.
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