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Muffled Whispers

“Can you feel the soul of an abandoned house, can you hear the whispering? " Quote by _Constance La France
Standing before this old, dilapidated house Memories leap out from the moss-grown crevices of my mind, Like snakes uncoiling, rather like bees swarming, Fragmented, scented and sour! I remember my old maternal uncle, Who had turned a widower at forty-one, The presiding deity of a joint family of fourteen. Most of the time he sprawled in the armchair, In the enclosed patio of this massive homestead In the living room was an old grandfather clock Ticking away like the faint heartbeats Of that decadent house with crumbling plaster He had seen heydays with many a ceremony of great fanfare, When the house used to board all kith and kin And the granary was full of paddy and tons of black gold. But as time slowly weakened his torso, The house too lost its onetime splendor. His children got scattered far and wide. They went to hoard fortunes abroad. But grand uncle refused to move away. With a shock, one day we heard of his death. He left the house orphaning it forever. Now the house remains fragment of an old memory. Though once I thought I had escaped, The compulsions of the past, Now I discern, I am still pinioned by it! As I stand before this house, my ears perk up, To hear what it whispers, its one-time glory, Or its sad deserted state? I wonder if I can ever enjoy the love and life, That once so luxuriously bloomed inside! May.27.2023 Writing Challenge ‘C’ Quotes Poetry Challenge Sponsor- Constance La France

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Date: 6/7/2023 5:58:00 PM
So interesting and sad, dear Valsa. You're lucky to have a large family, though. :) I love "now the house remains fragment of an old memory" Congratulations!
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Date: 6/6/2023 5:56:00 AM
- Once a beauty...only the soul remains - beautifully written, Valsa :) Congratulations on your win :) - hugs
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Date: 6/6/2023 3:54:00 AM
Back with congratulations on this winner in Constance's contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara
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Date: 6/5/2023 6:43:00 AM
Back with congratulations on your top contest win with this stunningly written poem, dear Valsa. Blessings
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Date: 6/4/2023 1:09:00 AM
"what it whispers, its one-time glory, Or its sad deserted state?" - A very beautifully written poem with plenty of symbols and images. Great picture presented. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/3/2023 7:05:00 PM
Valsa, thank you so much for sharing your wonderful poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations and well done !
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Date: 6/5/2023 3:07:00 AM
Thank you so much dear Constance for the awarding of first place for my poem and the chance given to take part in your contest.
Date: 6/3/2023 5:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win, Dear Valsa. You have created great images which bring back precious memories and nostalgia. An abandoned house, sometimes, becomes the symbol of our happy past...and speaks and connects to our soul. Love and best wishes ~ Mala
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Date: 5/30/2023 3:22:00 AM
This one is very expressive, filled with creativity, and it has good flow and rhythm. It reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. I need to check this contest out now that I have read a few entries. Sara
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Date: 5/29/2023 6:35:00 PM
'Snakes uncoiling' set the tone. The muffled whispers groan and moan... Precious penning, Valsa! :) Gershon
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Date: 5/28/2023 5:43:00 AM
Wonderful imagery, Valsa, that really captures the feeling of looking back on happy times. The house still resounds with the joy of those good days. I always try to picture the house in its former glory and the people who once lived there when I walk upon a derelict structure. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 5/27/2023 10:01:00 PM
Sad to see Valsa, Every time I see an abandoned house I try and picture it in happier times and who lived there. Just back from Norway, Hope you're keeping well. Tom
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Date: 5/27/2023 5:35:00 AM
Memories of a beloved past cherish our recall--as you have conveyed with splendid images, Valsa. The house still speaks of those pleasant times.
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