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2/23/2014 6:42:45 PM
Please read and criticize	This is free verse...Here is my collaboration Ibrahim...Verlena - Oblivion Dark Sunshine SALUTE Men were dead here and there, which swords had fallen everywhere. Looking around, bewildered was the General frowns as his heart thumped and pound. Torn was his army, fighters killed with everyone inquiring on who was in leadership. This was a lost battle. His mind told him to go. His heart was involved saying stay until the war is over. The face of the King he saw. A face of a foe, if he leaves now, the necessity of the war was the wrath of Thor. Confusion thus far Illusive to a battle lost. The General stood thinking with his heart split. His army was fleeing. What should he do about this? He decided not to be defeated by joining in. If he flees, he would be a coward and this was not happening. Therefore, he picked up his sword and struck the enemy turning a losing battle into his biggest victory. The General did not live to see the celebration for he was killed in fight. A stray arrow struck him in the back. Great was his achievement but narrow was his faith. The General name went in history. His bravery others did crave. The General was buried in a decorated grave! edited by Verlena on 2/23/2014 edited by Verlena on 2/23/2014
3/31/2014 1:40:28 AM
First PS submission ... Please critiqe	I enjoyed reading your poem. An advising tip would be to make your words play visually. This will enhance your writing and enrich the reader. Verlena S. Walker edited by Verlena on 3/31/2014 edited by Verlena on 3/31/2014
9/22/2014 8:52:51 PM
Poems wanted for new Magazine	Little-Known Nothing: If I can be a co-editor with my own page to theme and/or topic via poetry I am interested. A very neat idea you have here. When are you planning on launching this project. I am very well-written. Check me out on the Soup. I know I have read your poetry. you roc. I know you are worthy of me and I am you. Smile! ~Oblivion Dark Sunshine - Poetry Diva - Verlena S. Walker~ edited by Verlena on 9/22/2014
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