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Your Fatal Flaw

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Your Fatal Flaw

You seemed to be perfection in my eyes
Everything of beauty in you I saw
Your pure honesty left no place for lies
But alas, I’ve found your one fatal flaw

“What could this flaw be?” You ask me so sweet
Certain the answer could not be that grave
“If I know my flaw, I'll give you a treat
Why look so worried, dear? Tell me! Be brave!”

So with a heavy heart I pierce your soul
“It is pride, dear, PRIDE is your fatal flaw!”
You look aghast yet say, “Why this is droll!
Your argument is only made of straw.”

“FATAL….for from your presence I now part.
FATAL…for I bear with me, my dead heart.”

Eileen Manassian Ghali

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  1. Date: 3/10/2013 5:30:00 PM
    Ouch, pride does come before a fall. Most men have a problem with that one.

    Celeste Avatar Jade Celeste
    Date: 3/11/2013 7:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Well, Richard...it isn't gender specific, but I do believe that when it comes to love...yes, women are more giving and more capable of letting go of their pride for the one they love!
  1. Date: 3/10/2013 9:11:00 AM
    This is a real beauty of a poem. I love the third stanza. I piercr your soul. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

    Celeste Avatar Jade Celeste
    Date: 3/10/2013 9:27:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Lucilla. Thanks for reading and commenting.
    Celeste Avatar Jade Celeste
    Date: 3/10/2013 9:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    :) Thanks you for taking the time to read and comment!