Your Eyes

So clear I can see eyes so pure, to me holds my destiny ... Twice I looked there you were but this is the day you left me alone... Seeing your heart maybe they were bones sweet and bitterness loneliness coming close to the whirling beam of light, molten to the freeze of anger you altered all the grace I had, I guess I inherited this great hurt alone... Brooke

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Donna Jones

Date: 5/9/2014 8:51:00 PM

Very well done emotional write Brooke...liked it very much..

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 8:52:00 PM

Thank you Donna... nice to see you

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/9/2014 10:19:00 AM

Enjoyed the expression on longing, Brooke

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 4:15:00 PM

Thank you Dr.Ram

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/9/2014 8:37:00 AM

oh....... truly one needs a lot of practice to hide something when it comes to the eyes.. great write.. :), olive eloisa GBU.. :)

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 9:43:00 AM

thank you Dear Olive

Monterey Sirak

Date: 5/9/2014 8:21:00 AM

Powerful emotion! It seems like we can share happiness, but when we hurt, we hurt alone. Well done.

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 9:44:00 AM

Thank you Monterey.. hugs girlfriend

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/9/2014 7:30:00 AM

Awesome write Brooke-- wonderful emotional expression. Xx~Xx

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 7:33:00 AM

Thank you Kim... hugs

Paul Callus

Date: 5/9/2014 6:35:00 AM

Very heartfelt and strongly expressed; keep up with the sterling work! // paul

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 6:56:00 AM

Paul thank you so much..'hugs

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 6:55:00 AM

PAU THANK YOU so much... you are so nice... hugs Brooke

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/9/2014 1:58:00 AM

Life will always gift us with things we need/want and things we'd rather do without. No return policies on this. The best thing we could do, shine on through it all. This hit so hard. Excellent poem!

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 6:49:00 AM

DRAKE thank you.. you are so nice.... I am so honored ...thank you for visiting and commenting Brooke

Mel Merrill

Date: 5/9/2014 12:32:00 AM

Hi Brooke. I see you're the new best poet. Cool. I held that spot for as long as they allow. I luv your poems--no wonder you hold the "best new" honors...xxx...Mel

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/9/2014 6:41:00 AM

WOW thank you Mel.. I am so honored to have you visit and comment.. hugs xxx..Brooke

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen

Date: 5/8/2014 9:54:00 PM

A good sight in the eyes.

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/8/2014 10:05:00 PM

thank you so much...

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/8/2014 9:39:00 PM

Great write. Sad but loaded with depth and insight.... I just presented my write, titled - "About ,Those Angel Eyes" However it was a glory not sad at all.

Robert Lindley
Date: 5/8/2014 10:36:00 PM

Thanks for your comment on my offering. Yes there actually was sadness in my write but it pales when compared to the glory of having had the chance to meet and know her! I like so many young men made a tragic mistake and paid the price for it..

Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/8/2014 9:41:00 PM

Thank-you Robert.. I will check it out.. hugs