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Your Beginning

Vacant longing in a sacred bind Broken by love’s flaw Eyes spill jewels upon the kind Taking all . . . taking all Kiss a drop of falling rain Rising over the fears Yank the warmth out of the pain To welcome yester-tears It was never about me, Just falling around me Rejoice with me as they take me all And as I descend, As I descend to face the night, Know that my end, know that my end Is your beginning Chilled to the aching bone You pick up remnants of the past Far from home Where all the emptiness blooms and lasts Don’t crawl back to me in all your pain Don’t pick up the crystallizing rain Run, for my life never mattered Fragments of this dream—cold and shattered It was never about me Just falling around me Rejoice with me as they take me all And as I descend, Know that my end, know that my end And never goodbye

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Jake Ponce

Date: 4/23/2014 3:30:00 AM

Are you David William's sister? You both write very different yet equally splendid pieces.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 12/23/2013 10:39:00 PM

I can really relate to the loneliness and the despair in this poem. I also love the rhyme and your flow here, and the repetition of the lines. You are a very talented poet, Laura! Keep up the amazing work!

Carl Fraser

Date: 12/7/2013 8:22:00 PM

A little music would enhance these eloquent words so much, a wonderful write here Laura, blessings Carl

J.W. Earnings

Date: 12/6/2013 7:05:00 PM

Very beautifully written, sister Laura. . . I love this part and it has been a pleasure to read your fascinating rhymes - "Know that my end, know that my end Is your beginning" I agree with Stephen: the repetition is brilliant. Keep it up! -Dave, your silly brother x - DD I'm rating this a 6 out of 7.

Jake Ponce
Date: 4/23/2014 3:32:00 AM

And this comment just answered my question. LOL Keep writing, you guys! :D

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/6/2013 2:51:00 PM

- Laura, your poetry fascinates me .... They are usually deep with clear meaning and written proficient - Have a great weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Roger Horsch

Date: 12/6/2013 9:36:00 AM

Such a well written poem Laura, Very nicely done....Hugs....Roger

Johnny Rhinem

Date: 12/4/2013 3:59:00 PM

† I Really Dig The Voice Her Depth These Notes, Sweet Beautiful Laura ˜ Man Its Like No Heart Left Behind, You Know ? Beyound All The Special Effects Theatrical Hollywood Gizmo No, Constructed Pages Nor Fantasies; Just The Real Deal Jill! ˜ But One Thing Aside This Truth I Also Do Know, I Admire Your Beauty ˜ Happy Holidays, And Great Poe ˜ Love John

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/5/2013 8:03:00 PM

Thanks friend. Have a good one. :) ~Laura

Poet Tacito

Date: 12/4/2013 8:34:00 AM

Deep, dark, & fascinating. Descend/Ascend, holding me close/letting me go....such a war of the heart. Incredible writing.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/5/2013 8:03:00 PM

Hey Drake! Thanks for visiting :) ~Laura

Stephen Kilmer

Date: 12/3/2013 11:26:00 PM

Beautiful. I hear a lyrical movement to this verse. Perhaps a song. Love the repetition. It really brings it home. As always I am humbled you work. ~Kilmer

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/5/2013 8:03:00 PM

You are correct! So happy to see you around! Thanks so much<3~Laura