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You Went In Your Own Way

you went your way i sat there as you released your spirit and that old wicked smile played upon your lips i listened as you whispered something to someone only you knew was there i heard the clock go tick tock...just one time and your face lit... then dimmed you laughed low and you finally got to go home by janetta those of indian culture say that a final poem or song has to have one error.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2006




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Date: 9/15/2008 7:01:00 AM
Beautiful write Janetta. Congratulations on a most well deserved featured write of the week. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/15/2008 6:13:00 AM
I loved your poem and really loved the note at the end for I did not know this - God Bless & congrats on being featured
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Date: 9/15/2008 5:25:00 AM
A touching moment. I sat by by Mom and it was overwhelming. Excellent write. Congratulations on it being featured. Vince
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Date: 9/14/2008 6:53:00 PM
The short lines work well to convey your thoughts in this poem. Congratulations on having this creative piece featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen
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