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You Promised

You promised Yes you promised me That we would grow old together Our pathway would be traveled hand in hand Now I am faced with the possibility Yes the possibility Of traveling alone I cannot I don't want to The thought is unbearable I need you to be my everlasting My comfort My smile You alone know my heart Your whisper is my resonance I dance within your borders The music of you expands my horizons Let me be your tether I can be your immovable rock Let my unspoken be your comfort A surgeons knife cannot cut through our bond Do not swim to that distant shore Float upon our faith Ask God to help you complete our covenant For your breath is my own Your eyes help me see Your hands extend my reach As you travel within unconsciousness Be aware of my presence I will not leave you alone For you are my everything Come back to my loving arms For if you do not I will age, one hundred years In but a moment. I was writing this for Elly's last letter contest. I went over twenty lines so I can't enter it. Thankfuly this is a fictional account.

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/5/2014 6:22:00 AM

So beautiful and so touching. So many lines resonate with me, especially the aging one hundred years in a minute. I'm touched by this. I see your traders were too.....hugs

Monterey Sirak

Date: 9/18/2014 8:55:00 AM

Beautiful and romantic. Even though you can't enter it at least we get the pleasure of reading. I love the line "your hands extend my reach" It conjures up so many images for me.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/20/2014 8:58:00 AM

That is my favorite Line as well Monterey.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/16/2014 2:50:00 PM

So glad this is fiction because my heart was breaking for you. Fictional yet you wrote it with such heart and soul you had us all fooled and that's what makes a great poet.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/20/2014 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Brenda, you are kind.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/15/2014 10:46:00 PM

too bad it cannot be in the contest. You could always double up the lines and call it prose!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2014 12:04:00 AM

I could but I think it would take away from the poem. Thanks for the suggestion though.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/15/2014 10:45:00 PM

oh my gosh, this is outstanding work, Richard, and I am so grateful that I got to the end and found it was fiction. You are a really great poet!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2014 12:02:00 AM

What a nice thing to say, thanks Andrea.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/15/2014 8:27:00 PM

Another great write Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2014 12:01:00 AM

Thanks Arthur.

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/15/2014 3:46:00 PM

Hugs sweetie, seems as if the contest inspired you, I would love to see you enter it if you could, but it is sweet. I was ready to reach out and hold you, emotional. hugs honey. xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2014 12:00:00 AM

Goodnight and thanks Casarah, hugs back.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/14/2014 10:24:00 PM

Great write. Could you not edit it though I know that hurts and enter it. Or did you write a different one for the contest.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/15/2014 8:44:00 AM

Good choice. God Bless.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/15/2014 7:05:00 AM

Nope just this one and I removed it so someone else who followed the rules can enter the contest.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 9/14/2014 6:33:00 PM

Superlative write Rick. Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/15/2014 7:06:00 AM

Thanks Verlena.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 9/14/2014 5:27:00 PM

very touching and beautifully written. i'm so relieved to hear that it's fictional!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/15/2014 7:07:00 AM

I am thankful it is not, I appreciate the concearn.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/14/2014 1:57:00 PM

- Richard, this was heartbreaking and beautiful - Whatever contest .... number 1 in my heart - Thank you, it was a pleasure to read your work again, been a long time - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/14/2014 2:32:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise, I have been super busy these last number of weeks.