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You Fell Like October Rain

You fell in October, like autumn leaves Funny it was a hot day. The avocado tree was budding. I knew you only a short while, But it broke me to see your mother cry. She was inconsolable. And I thought I was strong, But my tears could not be kept at bay. Your friends gathered by your side, Oh what love they had for you. Your lover had mourned all he could, He was the strongest, Not one tear. They built you a house in the ground, So they said. They built you a bed, never to rise So I said. And in love they gathered around you. And laid you in it. That was the hardest, Interred you in red loam. And this was the finality, Who would have known? That your laughter would be so short, Thirty and one years?. They said we had to embrace death. Even come to love and desire it. He visits one and all. His cynical finality. It was hot and sunny today, But you fell like October rain. When heaven heaved in storm clouds, As they entrenched you underground.

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Date: 4/17/2024 4:49:00 AM
The loss of a loved one leave us with heavy hearts, A poignant write, Well penned Mo, a fave
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Date: 4/19/2024 11:08:00 AM
Thanks Joseph!
Date: 4/16/2024 5:16:00 PM
This is beautifully bitter Mo. You really are quite talented. The title is exquisite
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Date: 4/19/2024 11:08:00 AM
Thanks Tom. We buried her in October of 2016, naturally October rain was ringing in my head
Date: 4/14/2024 8:24:00 AM
What a powerful write. So sorry. Pain can last a long time. Good memories are the best kind.... Have a blessed day writing away......................
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Date: 4/19/2024 11:07:00 AM
Thanks Paula. Blessings
Date: 4/11/2024 4:41:00 PM
I like the way you brought out the emotions through this one, Marugu. To die young is always a shock to those who are left behind. Your poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 4/19/2024 11:06:00 AM
Thanks Bill!
Date: 4/8/2024 10:38:00 AM
This made me tear up, sometimes the most special ones leave us, early, as they belong in heaven they say, touching and poignant write so well woven in such a metaphorical manner dear marugo, i felt so much reading this especially the ending! Hits strong! Reminds me of my bestfriend that i lost so young, sigh Pleasure always reading your work, sending you light
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Date: 4/9/2024 2:22:00 AM
It was heart wrenching. I appreciate your visit and your wonderful comment. Light and love
Date: 4/8/2024 2:45:00 AM
This is a magnificent poem. I have been evading funerals these days, but not for long. Thank you for your poem.
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Date: 4/9/2024 2:20:00 AM
Thanks Victor. Find peace my friend
Date: 4/7/2024 5:20:00 PM
your poem was powerful and filled with grief. Beautifully written and heartbreaking. For some, death comes too soon. So it was for my younger brother...so I can relate to your words. A masterpiece, sincerely! have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 4/7/2024 11:32:00 PM
Oh I'm sorry about your brother. I wrote this when I lost a friend back in 2016 through a brain clot. She was so young and full of life. It still hurts to this day
Date: 4/7/2024 8:08:00 AM
Wow . A very powerful poem. I can feel it. Well written and expressed !
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Date: 4/7/2024 11:32:00 PM
Thanks Heidi
Date: 4/7/2024 6:48:00 AM
- Death came far too soon...no one will embrace death until they have lived life to the fullest - A heartbreaking poem, Marugu - hugs
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Date: 4/7/2024 11:33:00 PM
Yes it did. Thanks for the read Anne-Lise
Date: 4/7/2024 6:03:00 AM
Great use of analogy and metaphor..
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Date: 4/7/2024 11:33:00 PM
Thanks SO

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