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You Can'T See Me

So many times I stand right in front of you, but you pass me as though I was a ghost. I scream as hard as I can; my screams fall back to me like gravity. You only see what your mind wants you to see - someone who isn't me, as I try to break through the wall you've created in your mind, to try and make you see Me..... Photo #3 I chose the title to express how inner true selves sometimes are invisible to the ones we love or hold dear.

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Date: 5/29/2016 8:33:00 PM
Now this is wonderfully expressed based on a photo ;)
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 5/30/2016 11:15:00 AM
Thank you so much Angeline!! *^_^*
Date: 4/28/2016 12:52:00 AM
Teddy, I love it toooo... :) Congrats on your awesome Being Invisible win...Love LINDA
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 5/30/2016 11:13:00 AM
Thank you so much Linda!! *^_^* <3 Sorry for my late reply...
Date: 4/26/2016 10:43:00 AM
Congrats on your win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/27/2016 3:26:00 AM
Thank you so much for your kind applause, BL!!! :-)
Date: 4/26/2016 9:54:00 AM
Very creatively done, Teddy. Congratulations on your nice win in this first difficult Premiere contest! Sandra
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/27/2016 3:25:00 AM
Thank you so much for your applause Sandra!!! *^_^*
Date: 4/26/2016 9:15:00 AM
Teddy, I really enjoyed this one. Great use of words and the broken lines create gaps in thought that give the feeling of grasping for thoughts and just the right word to convey the message.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/27/2016 3:24:00 AM
WOW!!! It's as though you read my mind as I penned this verse!!! Well, thank you James, for your kind comment!!! :-)
Date: 4/26/2016 8:53:00 AM
A well written one...congrats on your placement, Teddy. :)
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/27/2016 3:22:00 AM
Thanks so much Moon Flower!!! *^_^*
Date: 4/26/2016 8:26:00 AM
Teddy, the reason, I placed your poem, is plain as day. You did rather well keeping to the topic with the invisible state and space.... Congratulations on your Invisible win. I thank you for the entry. I have a blog up, describing the experience of running my first premiere contest. "My first experience was not as easy ... :( DEPRESSION" drop by and enjoy the few I did place. Forever **SKAT**
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/27/2016 3:21:00 AM
You are very much welcome Skat!!! I really enjoyed the contest (also, my first premier contest!!!) Thank you for your warm applause!!! *^_^* <3
Date: 4/23/2016 3:09:00 AM
Intersting..
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/24/2016 4:38:00 PM
;-)
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Hotpink Angellover
Date: 4/23/2016 1:30:00 PM
You're Welcome.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/23/2016 4:43:00 AM
Thank you! ;-)

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