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You Are Not My Life

The life I'm living is really tragic, I'm just glad I didn't get hit by static. As these words pass through my mind, to these funny verses is what you'll find. Days past, and i still feel like this, and what you see, is what this is. As your words seem to attack, I know now what matters most is how i act. See how you push us farther apart, now I'm cursed with this versing art. It's like you don't trust me anymore, I did most things right, but what for? I know you'll never believe me, you just need to look deep inside and see. So why am I writing this down today? Maybe I want to take this pain away. I know your going to read this, you might yell, and ask what this is. But I can't keep it in, It's better than us screamin'. I just wanted to let you know, that I want to leave, and you should let me go. As I sit in class today, questioning myself, is there another way. There's so many things going through my head, I just want to erase it all, and go to bed. Soon I'll make my life great, make all the mistakes straight. I always ask myself, how? Looking back and thinking wow! You always glare at me, trying to see what I'll be. All I ever wanted to be was you, but all you ever gave me were open wounds. I want to know so tell me, what you always wanted me to be. 'Cause you think you know it all, but if I take your advice, just don't let me fall. As this cursed poem goes on, I wonder what went wrong. This time I'll make you see, what I want you to let me be. As time passes by, I still wonder why? I just wanted to let you know, before I let all of this go. That you are not my life

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 5/20/2010 9:13:00 AM
Wow......just amazing friend
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Date: 5/17/2010 8:43:00 AM
Wow very pure, not sugar coated or idealised at all :) and perhaps tough maybe or you could try some half-rhyme and have a word like tooth. Or even some internal rhyme :)
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Date: 5/12/2010 6:20:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Rosemarie. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/11/2010 7:40:00 PM
Your poem is very raw
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Date: 5/11/2010 6:05:00 PM
Nice expressions of thoughts I enjoyed it
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Date: 5/11/2010 5:20:00 PM
Hi Rosemarie, thank you for your comments. Now on to you... love is a hard subject to tackle in poetry. Especially about another person, but you've done a nice job. i like your tone and the melencholy it brings. I would suggest changing "me" to "us" in the 9th line. Maybe think about changing your title to "you are not my life". I do hope you are talking about a man and not letting your actual life go. No man is worth it! This is getting wordy. Welcome to the Soup. -Mike
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