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I was water I flowed as calm as a breeze You hampered my flux Stopped a force of nature dead in its tracks You brought me to my knees You swept through my forest You burned down all of my trees You did it so naturally You did it with the slightest of ease

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Chelsea ...

Date: 7/19/2009 1:26:00 PM

I really like this one, I have to say it's my favorite one by you, I love how you used symbolism in this poem.

Nicole Sharon Brown

Date: 7/17/2009 4:39:00 PM

I applaud you on this one... it is great... congrats on being featured

Brandee Augustus

Date: 7/17/2009 12:47:00 PM

I loved how your fire and water analogy could be about an actual fire that can't be stopped by water or it can be like a relationship between to people. It's sort of sensual and frightening at the same time. I like poems that can get different emotions out of you. Brilliant!

Ciara Aiyana Ashley-Garn

Date: 7/15/2009 1:57:00 AM

Wow! James Congradulations on your feature!! you and your poem deserved to be featured!! Ciara=)

Raul Moreno

Date: 7/14/2009 1:45:00 PM

James, congrats on your feature...Raul

Nicole Sharon Brown

Date: 7/13/2009 4:40:00 PM

beautifully written congrats on being featured

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 7/13/2009 4:27:00 PM

Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura :)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/13/2009 2:36:00 PM

Congratulations on your featured poem James. Love, Carol

James Fraser

Date: 7/13/2009 2:26:00 PM

Nice write James, congratulations on being featured>>James

Candice Manibog

Date: 7/13/2009 11:50:00 AM

congrats on being featured. this poem is very good. i love the symbolism. :)

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 7/13/2009 7:43:00 AM

Congratulations on your featured poem. Enjoy the honor. Ernilando

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/13/2009 2:40:00 AM

I love your expression here. Writing about anything helps bring release. Whether it is your situation or a situation that a friend has told you about writing helps get solutions or free one from the emotion of the situation. Sara

Oluwaseun Ogunbiyi

Date: 7/13/2009 2:07:00 AM

unfortunately, this poem exudes a great deal of belated expectation. But at least writing provides half of the solution, it helps you ease out. I hope writing this it helped you.

Ciara Aiyana Ashley-Garn

Date: 7/9/2009 5:57:00 PM

this is a very beautiful poem and it seems as though it comes natrally for you...keep writing! Ciara =)

Patricia Prescott

Date: 7/8/2009 7:19:00 PM

Looks like your "You" hurt you too, Ahh lifes lessons, we must carry on, it will get better....Hugs....Patty

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/7/2009 4:06:00 PM

Not sure if this is love? or a not so nice person? Welcome to the soup.

Misty Hoot

Date: 7/7/2009 9:44:00 AM

This describes something we've all been through. Very beautiful. It hits home. I'll have to read more of your poems. :)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/7/2009 3:08:00 AM

Good morning and wecome to PoetrySoup James. Such a sad but excellent write. Love, Carol