Yearning

a spellbound frog sits gazing at his reflection yearning for a kiss ----------------------------- Contest: Traditional Haiku Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi

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Rizwana Bhurani

Date: 11/15/2015 10:56:00 PM

A wonderful composition....like reading it.....in today's science prone age I feel animals are compassionate than human.....human need to learn frm them

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 12:10:00 PM

So true, Rizwana! At least animals live according to their natural instincts; humans have an intellect which very often is badly made use of and then goes to waste! ~ Regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/14/2015 8:22:00 PM

LOL Paul, I am the frog, thus staring at my reflection, no princess for me!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/16/2015 10:46:00 AM

I thought you already met a 50x3 princess!! a chilly experience:)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/14/2015 3:13:00 PM

That just about sums me up!!! Great Haiku!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2015 4:33:00 PM

Thank you for the 'like', Arthur. If you are a prince-frog, then I am sure that a lovely princess will soon be coming to your rescue:) All the best! // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/14/2015 3:10:00 PM

I like this Haiku, Paul. I interpreted the frog as the trapped prince, or any prince charming too. Congrats! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2015 4:31:00 PM

You read it well, too, Sandra:) It is interesting how different interpretations can be acquired! Thank you for your lovely feedback. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/14/2015 2:03:00 PM

Dear Paul, I got quite a giggle reading this and thinking of a prince looking like a frog. Still, the prince would probably rather find a princess than another prince. LOL So cute! Congratulations! Love, carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2015 4:29:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed, Carolyn! It also crossed my mind that the frog hopped to the pond after coming out of the closet! Thank you for a lovely visit and nice comments. Love &Hugs // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/13/2015 2:25:00 PM

Paul in haiku you must stay factual-so a frog could not be spellbound or yearn for a kiss- Congratulations on your winning verse. Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2015 3:53:00 PM

Thank you Debbie. Yes, I understand your point; in my mind I had a human-frog who was under a spell, waiting to be kissed in order that the spell gets broken. // Have a nice weekend. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/12/2015 10:25:00 PM

I like thinking of this one as a prince trapped in the frog's body! Congrats on the winner list, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2015 9:47:00 AM

Andrea is right!! Thank you...and have a lovely weekend:) // paul

David Mohn

Date: 3/12/2015 7:14:00 PM

seems frogs are very much like humans Paul...congrats to you

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2015 9:46:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by and for the congrats, David. Regards....paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/12/2015 12:18:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats on your HM - we share the same honour :-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 1:12:00 PM

Thank you Jan....Hms are Happy Memories:) hugs // paul

Julia Ward

Date: 3/12/2015 11:43:00 AM

Ooh! I wasn't expecting the surprise! // Congratulations on your Honorable Mention, Paul! Hugs, Julia

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 1:11:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed, Julia...lovely to see you smiling. Hugs // paul

Kp Nunez

Date: 3/12/2015 10:01:00 AM

Cute! Dare I? haha...Well wishes, Paul. :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 1:14:00 PM

Thanks Kim.....come on, have a go:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/12/2015 8:05:00 AM

hahaha i like it Paul.. :)! frog prince?!! :P

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 1:16:00 PM

Pleased it gave you something to smile about, Olive_eloi:) Could well be Prince Charming waiting for his loved one! hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/12/2015 5:46:00 AM

oh I love the humour here Paul - Great one! Hugs Jan xxx 7 xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 12:17:00 PM

Pleased you liked this one, Jan. I wrote it after I read your haiku and realized there was a haiku contest on; managed to enter just in time. I also had one ready in my mind to enter for PD's, but I was too late:( Hugs // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/12/2015 12:21:00 AM

That kiss will make a splash! very cute, Paul...hugs, Rhonda

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 12:14:00 PM

Thank you, Rhonda! Glad you enjoyed. Might get two frogs in the end!:) hugs // paul